my favourite place was me and you: chapter 6

[kikis2]

 Title: my favourite place was me and you
Author: Kiki
Fandom: Glee
Pairing/Character(s): Puck/Rachel/Santana, Rachel/OMC undertones
Rating: M 
Word count: 3934
Spoilers: None, futurefic
Summary: Rachel is forced to leave the spotlight and return home to face the people she sold for her dream.
Disclaimer. None of this is mine.

Comments

[aaronlisa]

Just found this story today. I love how in character Puck, Santana and Rachel are. As well I like the flashbacks. I can't wait for more.

[kikis2]

Thanks! I really like writing this story, so hopefully there's more soon.

[xxblacklilyxx]

This left me heartbroken again. It hurts yet it's so good. I thought I was going to hate Julian, but I actually liked him, I loved the cafeteria scene. It's hard taking a side in this story, it's more like there are no sides, and they both made mistakes, I love how many layers their breakup has, and you've done an amazing job tying up the flashbacks with what's happening and releasing new information...

can't wait for more

[kikis2]

Aw thank you. I kind of hate writing good guy/bad guy stuff, so usually I write everyone as the bad guy...just to different degrees.

And I kinda like Julian too lol.

[fall_into_life]

I still really like this piece. I think you've done an excellent job keeping the original Gleeks in character (even though they've been pushed so far into the future), and although I can't really see Puck as an architect, I keep reminding myself that I can't really see him as anything but a delinquent (he's better than that, but hell if he knows it), and of everything "respectable" he could get up to, it's hardly the least likely profession. Also, I love how Santana is still a huge bitch, but because everyone is used to her, it lessens the impact, and Rachel is still overdramatic, but same thing applies

[kikis2]

Ugh. Writing "check" literally hurt, but thank you for pointing out those errors. I can't stand reading over my own stuff and I swear homonyms are like my nemesis.

I couldn't think of anything for Puck either, but then I kind of imagined him sitting in class (for once) doodling to waste time in a notebook already filled with sketches of high-rises and abstract cities.

The end scene is a little cracky. Santana's role seemed easy, but the end line was supposed to convey that Puck saw something that made him nervous. I cut this bit about Rachel's fathers freaking out about Julian, one of them fretting that they raised her too liberal :p

(After your first comment, Julian has a British accent in my head, so I have to tell myself he was sent to boarding school to not get confused lol).

Thanks for commenting :)

[fall_into_life]

No problem! I'm just glad you're taking it so well.

The last line definitely got that across. I can't see any other reason Puck would deny himself watching his woman and another, undeniably gorgeous woman, making time.

Oh, I am flattered. I love that Julian now has a British accent in your headspace.

[meagan4dominic]

Another amazing chapter
I really like that we got to meet Julian and might I say that he is hilarious, I adore him
"But if we make out, I might get an ass kicking," he says lightly. "It would all be very 90s rom-com." - SO FUNNY!

I can't wait to find out what Puck and Santana think about Julian's visit

One of the things I like most about this story is that I have no idea what's going to happen next, I'm just sitting back and enjoying the ride. So I have no idea how it's going to end, I'm just enjoying this trip through this AU with Rachel, Puck and Santana
Can't wait for the next chapter!

[kikis2]

Go Julian. OCs usually get all the hate, so he totally breaks the mold <3

The fallout will be pretty dramatic (for a change, right?).

There's only a few chapters left, so hopefully I'll get the resolution right lol. As always, thanks for commenting.