What I really liked about this fic is that it reminded me of when a few of the Block B members were really into playing an MMORPG game early on in their career! Haha, that really made me smile :) I'm not a really big fan of Taeil and Jihoon in a romantic sense, but I'm happy to have given this fic a chance and read it! Your Jihoon was just the right amounts of playful for me; he was teasing and cute and sweet and fun, and that's pretty much exactly how I see Jihoon! So good job on that :) Your Taeil's a bit shyer than I see him, personally, but we all have different head canons, and it didn't bother me at all to read him as a shier and less straightforward character! I really enjoyed how eager Jihoon was to impress Taeil because sometimes I felt like that echoed real life; Jihoon is so fond of Taeil, and it's terribly cute ♥
You have a few errors in your narrative that kind of threw me out of the fic for a few seconds ;; goosebumps flared to life on his skin when the younger man's hand found it's way into his shirt. I think you may
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Haha really? Totally not what gave me the idea, but that's pretty awesome.I'm glad you gave it a chance as well, I'm not entirely into them as a couple either, but I've recently gained an appreciation for the two of them, and I'd written a slightly more depressing fic that was broken!TaePyo and someone had requested something happier with them. Taeil actually came out a bit shyer then I'd intended but I suppose that's okay as long as someone thinks Jihoon is good~ (and it kind of fits into the story I suppose.). :3
Yeah, I didn't really have time to read over it before I posted it as I'm not on my own computer and it was well past the time I normally go to bed for work, haha. Thank you for the crit, it's not overstepping boundaries at all, everyone needs someone to tell them what they're doing wrong every so often, so I'm not bothered. It's something I feel has popped up in some of my other fics as well, I'm sure, so it's clearly something I should try to work on. :P <3
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Well, that's a pretty awesome coincidence then :) I love the fic that Block B gets written, so I always make sure to give a fic a chance regardless about how I feel about pairings! They are really cute together; I love their little bond with one another. It does fit the story :) So it's more than okay!
Oh, no problem! I feel like everyone benefits from someone else offering their opinion (so long as they are not rude; there's no reason to be rude/mean to someone else). Once you start noticing these types of things, you'll get much better at self-editing and cutting back on these problems! :) I'm sure you can do it!
Yay, that's good to hear! It's a great fandom! Also, if you're not busy in the next month or two, I hope you'll consider joining the exchange at blockbtime ! ♥
Haha me too~ there seems to be not enough written for them though... :<
Yes, concrit is great for writers, as long as they can take the criticism without becoming offended haha. I'm normally a bit better with my writing, but I always get caught writing late at night when I need to get up early for work, so I don't have much motivation to do much more then a quick once over. ;P And I have no friends who read/like Asian Entertainment fiction XD.
I actually meant to join sooner but I got busy and forgot about it. XD But I've joined now~ haha.
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This was so damn good and just enough fluffy feels from it, i'll sleep good tonight ^^
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I'm glad you liked it~ :3
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You have a few errors in your narrative that kind of threw me out of the fic for a few seconds ;; goosebumps flared to life on his skin when the younger man's hand found it's way into his shirt. I think you may ( ... )
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Yeah, I didn't really have time to read over it before I posted it as I'm not on my own computer and it was well past the time I normally go to bed for work, haha. Thank you for the crit, it's not overstepping boundaries at all, everyone needs someone to tell them what they're doing wrong every so often, so I'm not bothered. It's something I feel has popped up in some of my other fics as well, I'm sure, so it's clearly something I should try to work on. :P <3 ( ... )
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Oh, no problem! I feel like everyone benefits from someone else offering their opinion (so long as they are not rude; there's no reason to be rude/mean to someone else). Once you start noticing these types of things, you'll get much better at self-editing and cutting back on these problems! :) I'm sure you can do it!
Yay, that's good to hear! It's a great fandom!
Also, if you're not busy in the next month or two, I hope you'll consider joining the exchange at blockbtime ! ♥
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Yes, concrit is great for writers, as long as they can take the criticism without becoming offended haha. I'm normally a bit better with my writing, but I always get caught writing late at night when I need to get up early for work, so I don't have much motivation to do much more then a quick once over. ;P And I have no friends who read/like Asian Entertainment fiction XD.
I actually meant to join sooner but I got busy and forgot about it. XD But I've joined now~ haha.
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