Comments | kimberlite8: Marching Song, Part 1/?

kimberlite8

Marching Song, Part 1/?

May 18, 2014 00:57

I wrote this for dealbreaker19 as a part of the SansaxSandor letter exchange. It blossomed from what was suppose to be one letter into a full blown
epistolary romance. This is the first letter of several letters.

Title: Marching Song,
Author: kimberlite8
Summary: Sandor's war letters to Sansa while he is on campaign. An epistolary smutfic. "It feels so sweet to fall ( Read more... )

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kimberlite8 May 20 2014, 01:43:49 UTC

Thanks! I wish more fanfics were graphic actually or not so sermonizing when it comes to the role of violence and retribution in medieval society. I read "Waning of the Middle Ages" by john huizinga when I was in college (and recently about a year ago) and I remember how much this passage impressed upon me that the medieval world was truly intense:

"so violent and motley was life, that it bore the mixed smell of blood and roses. the men of that time always oscillate between the fear of hell and the most naive joy, between cruelty and tenderness, between harsh asceticism and insane attachment to the delights of this world, between hatred and goodness, always running to extremes."

I want my Sandor to embody that kind of mentality.

Thanks for your comments! I wish I had one tenth of your productivity! It feels so good to be writing again and its certainly icing on the cake to get comments when I do.

appyt May 18 2014, 13:41:42 UTC

Oh oh oh.. I do love this..

kimberlite8 May 20 2014, 01:33:46 UTC

Thank you! I haven't written anything new is ages. It feels good to stretch my muscles and have people such as yourself enjoy it. I hope to keep you entertained in the next few chapters.

appyt May 20 2014, 13:10:09 UTC

I have great faith in your ability to entertain me. :) Thank you in advance. :)

westeroswolf May 19 2014, 16:05:02 UTC

Very excited about your new endeavour. This is as delicious as the roast duck with pomegranate sauce that Sandor dreams of!
I think letters is a wonderful format. It feels more intimate that a story written in the third person. The tone is perfect, it's sweet but still Sandor. The sense of misery and longing is pouring off the page.
Poor Sansa celebrating her name day without him, I'm very curious to read more about the nature of their relationship.

kimberlite8 May 20 2014, 01:54:03 UTC

The tone is perfect, it's sweet but still Sandor.Ah my beta was advising me to rein in the sap. I'm not sure I did such a great job. I love writing again but my style has always been so florid. Not so much in dialogue but in internal monologue, I guess I've always written what Sandor feels which is different than what he would actually say or even cognitate. So this letter format really pushes me creatively ( ... )

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kimberlite8 May 22 2014, 02:57:24 UTC

Thanks for your kind words and encouragement zsra187! Its been years since I've written anything with a fresh new plot. Partially because of lack of inspiration but also due to sheer laziness. I feels so good to get comments from a writer that I respect as much as you.

a perfect Sandor voice - so honest and crude.
I'm trying! This is pretty fun for me as Sandor has no need to speak harshly. In this context, Sansa is safely cocooned in her Winterfell (though not his lover) and they have an ease of sorts. So what would his voice sound like to someone who is probably his only real friend? It can't be full of put downs yet he has to sound authentically affectionate without losing his essential self.

The 'did you seal the envelope with your spit?' bit did it for me.After you commented on this, I find myself haunted by this line for the wrong reasons. They wouldn't have had self gumming envelopes in the middle ages. Canon even says letters are sealed with wax (and I went so far as to seal the handwritten copy of this letter to ( ... )

maroucya May 20 2014, 23:17:32 UTC

Wow, that was really nice! The tone was perfect; I could really picture Sandor writing the letter and almost hear his voice speaking in my head. I also loved that you didn’t shy away from showing how crude and harsh a warrior he still is, not matter his relation with Sansa and the time he has spent at the Quiet Island. That bit where he tells Sansa about that man’s head he and his crew sent flying over the Dreadfort’s wall was perfect in that sense - especially since he adds how much it made him laugh… That certainly doesn’t sound like something a man should write to his ladylove! Sandor later tells Sansa about being unsure of which things he should tell her or not and he’s obviously not lying given what I just pointed out. Still, I’m quite certain Sansa is more than used in hearing her lover say all sorts of inacceptable things so he doesn’t need worry too much ( ... )

kimberlite8 May 22 2014, 03:16:53 UTC

The tone was perfect; I could really picture Sandor writing the letter and almost hear his voice speaking in my head.That is the highest of praise. I admit when I'm thinking of this story (which is all the time now!), Sandor's voice is always in my head. My beta improved upon the grammar but I changed it back because Sandor's voice in my head would say something redundant like "I want you to tell me about everything I’m missing out on, being away ( ... )