Marching Song, Part 5/?

Jun 29, 2014 15:56

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appyt June 30 2014, 00:08:44 UTC
:) Reading in AO3

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kimberlite8 July 2 2014, 17:14:21 UTC
Hihi, Sandor's childhood memories are hilarious.
I wanted to suggest that they were sorta dark. He had to leave his Father's Keep early in life if he was already a solider by age 12. But its not his personality to lookback and feel sorry for his orphan self is how I envision it.

what a romantic under all these layers of crudeness - endless simulations of kisses with a magnifying glass
Hehe! I do think he has a tremendous need for physical touch and affection.

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kimberlite8 July 2 2014, 17:28:23 UTC
I like all the little things you put in; things that are so natural and conversation-like, they really fool me into thinking that I actually am reading a letter!

Thank you! This is a plotless story so I'm trying to make it interesting by bringing verisimilitude to their lives. There's so many brilliant writers in Sansan, but the one story that I read and wished I could have had the brillance to write it is Zmeischa's Things Preserved and Things Lost. Her ability to create a domestic type story, full of little touches that made her characters seem to have lived, it blew my mind.

You have SUCH a knack for writing him, you really really do. I especially love how utterly, unapologetically crude he is!
That's why I wanted to write this story! Free Sandor from plot contraints so the man can just talk! Sansa isn't the only one that wants him to just talk "oh about everything and anything"

I must confess, I wasn't entirely sure how you were going to turn this into a epistolary smut-fic but now I can kind of see where you're going with it ( ... )

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westeroswolf July 1 2014, 14:13:45 UTC
What you sow on your name day you reap throughout the year, and he wants a blowjob on his. Sandor you sneaky dog! Hope he gets one though!
How you integrated Sansa's letter was brilliant. I love your style where it's so sweet on the surface but a few dirty little details that Sandor instantly picks up on. It really ramps up the UST. As you know I have a thing about Sandor wanking so I was delighted to see that.
Sansa's comment that she could solve her family's problems with a letter is heart breaking : (

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kimberlite8 July 2 2014, 17:40:18 UTC
Sandor you sneaky dog!

:D I just love writing 'chatting up' Sandor.

How you integrated Sansa's letter was brilliant.
Oh thank you! Sansa's style seems so artifical when compared to Sandor. Makes me realize how flowery my voice is as I try to juggle it all.

a few dirty little details that Sandor instantly picks up on.
Well Sansa does think about Loras' chest in canon, so she has something for chests I think!

Sansa's comment that she could solve her family's problems with a letter is heart breaking : (
I dont want to remove the story from the world of realpolitiks. Not that the stakes are necessary high like with Robb/Jeyne. But its just not realistic that either of them would ignore political consequences when they live in a society that says marriage is about partnerships, and love comes after.

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maroucya July 4 2014, 01:13:38 UTC
This chapter was enjoyable on every level. I really loved getting to read one of Sansa’s letters. You write her writing (This is confusing…) very well. It made me sad when she complained about feeling so inadequate. I can understand why she would think something like that though since her skills are not practical ones but it makes me sad that she would doubt herself for that reason… :( Sansa you are wonderful, trust me ( ... )

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kimberlite8 July 6 2014, 20:39:14 UTC
I can understand why she would think something like that though since her skills are not practical ones but it makes me sad that she would doubt herself for that reason… :( Sansa you are wonderful, trust me!
Oh I should have put this in the letter, perhaps. Sandor reassuring Sansa that she's doing a good job. I wonder if its in character for him?

I’m sure that almost every night, she expected Sandor to join her in her bedroll and have his way with her and as she did, she would have certainly tried to make herself believe that it was the last thing she wanted while in truth, she was almost getting impatient!

Maroucia! I loved reading your comments about this chapter. It got my mind spinning off in all these little smut fics. That is such a delicious prompt.

Moon Gates is quite a little gem with those kinds of feelings. Maybe one day I'll write my own. I wish it wasn't so difficult to write for me. I'm the biggest procrastinator when it comes to writing.

Wow, I’m sure he re-read that part a thousand times.Haha, yes, she has him ( ... )

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kimberlite8 July 6 2014, 21:08:48 UTC
I’m sure that almost every night, she expected Sandor to join her in her bedroll and have his way with her and as she did, she would have certainly tried to make herself believe that it was the last thing she wanted while in truth, she was almost getting impatient!

A prompt fill for you maroucia!

Scream and I swear I'll kill you. You got that, little bird? Sansa nods obediently, to the night air.

Be good or else I'm going to have to be real bad, she imagines him saying while lying face down on her bedroll, her body rutting against the mattress, her wrists behind the small of her back as if they were held there by force.

I love how your cunt clenches when you struggle. Come on, fight me harder. She squeezes her legs tightly as if squeezing that big, stiff thing. She pictured it, pumping into her, luxuriantly, as the wool of his breeches and his rough leather belt scrapped against her bared buttocks.

Fuck, I'm going to come in you.Oh Gods be good, that was the trick! The tension between what she should be wanting and what she ( ... )

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maroucya July 6 2014, 22:59:06 UTC
Wow that was so great and hot! Short and sweet as one might say. If Sandor only knew what she was thinking! And that’s exactly the kind of thing I meant in my comment! HA! I do love the idea of Sansa having this rape fantasy because of how fucked up her introduction to sexuality has been. I think it’s really believable and I did give a try at it with Moon Gates. I’m happy you enjoyed it. I just loved the idea that images of a much more explicit assault then the one she experienced at the BWB night with Sandor would come unbidden to her mind at night and that she’d be aroused about it, to her utter horror and shame. And then, Sandor making his appearance and taking her almost exactly as she had imagined was just the icing on the lemon cake. Anyways ( ... )

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