Throughout the entire poem you're very heavy on the repetition, except for the line "friends betray our souls decay our minds relay it all go". It sounds a bit awkward. Can you make it more like the other lines?
Other than that one thing, I really rather like it. Crazy, man. Can I get some of whatever you're on?
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Other than that one thing, I really rather like it. Crazy, man. Can I get some of whatever you're on?
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I like it. I really do. hehe
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