parachute

[kisskicker]

upon reaching the ground,
sun-bleached red with cheeks a
piping white,
the parachute heaved its
final sigh of relief --
"what a long way to save one's breath,"
he thought,
"but a person less and i'd have
drifted off."

comments, por favor?

Comments

[driedruesunday]

i don't understand what line 6 is getting at. i get everything else as well as i can without it.

Poetry

[anonymous]

Im not the best poetry critic but I like this!!!
Do you have an ID at the poetry critical?
I just joined!!

Re: Poetry

[anonymous]

you bet i have one. i havent been there in years, though. not to post, anyway. i was the crown bitch of tetto.