Hope you guys like this one~ There's no particular time period for this. (:
Wolfram was a little oblivious at times, but he wasn’t stupid. He knew that Yuuri was hiding something from him. And lately he had noticed how much the older Shibuya brother disliked Konrart.
They were at the Shibuya household temporarily for Yuuri to study and visit his
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Umm, I'm not sure if I'll continue, but I'll try. ^^" I have to write with pen and paper first. Thanks for commenting! (:
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I also liked your subtle humour ("Yuuri was clearly creeped out by the suddenly ‘cheerful’ Wolfram.")
I think, as constructive criticism, the next chapter should delve into more thoughts/feelings that explain their motivations so the reader doesn't start to dislike Yuuri or Conrard, who both seem to be acting rather selfishly--albeit understandably so.
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And yeah, I haven't written KKM in a looonggg time, so the characters may be a tad out-of-character. I did plan on delving into Yuuri's and Conrad's emotions more (because both are innately so unselfish!) but it somehow was difficult to put into words.
Thanks for your lovely comment! (:
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I don't think they are totally OOC. People are very multi-faceted and that is what partly makes fanfiction so fun to me--it allows us to explore real human emotions--'dark' and 'light'--with characters that we love.
Your writing is great! I think you could be very successful at a multichapter story--just plan out a loose outline for each chapter to the end and give it a try! Even a few chapters is great. Actually, I like it when there are only a few, shorter chapters.
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