A conyuu fanfic

Dec 30, 2009 19:44


Hope you guys like this one~ There's no particular time period for this. (:

Wolfram was a little oblivious at times, but he wasn’t stupid. He knew that Yuuri was hiding something from him. And lately he had noticed how much the older Shibuya brother disliked Konrart.

They were at the Shibuya household temporarily for Yuuri to study and visit his ( Read more... )

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kite_92 December 31 2009, 03:18:16 UTC
I'm really glad you liked it! I haven't written anything to do with KKM for a while.

Umm, I'm not sure if I'll continue, but I'll try. ^^" I have to write with pen and paper first. Thanks for commenting! (:

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mightymaeve December 31 2009, 00:16:24 UTC
I liked this one too--if only for the interesting angles you presented. I felt for Wolfram and Yuuri the most: Wolfram with his dejected loneliness and sudden hope; Yuuri with his impatient and selfish, but honest love.
I also liked your subtle humour ("Yuuri was clearly creeped out by the suddenly ‘cheerful’ Wolfram.")
I think, as constructive criticism, the next chapter should delve into more thoughts/feelings that explain their motivations so the reader doesn't start to dislike Yuuri or Conrard, who both seem to be acting rather selfishly--albeit understandably so.

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kite_92 December 31 2009, 03:17:05 UTC
I've never written a multi-chaptered fic, actually. ^^"

And yeah, I haven't written KKM in a looonggg time, so the characters may be a tad out-of-character. I did plan on delving into Yuuri's and Conrad's emotions more (because both are innately so unselfish!) but it somehow was difficult to put into words.

Thanks for your lovely comment! (:

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mightymaeve December 31 2009, 12:57:55 UTC
My pleasure! I always hesitate to offer constructive criticism because I know myself, I get all down on myself and I don't want to do that to someone else. It is a fine art to be able to take criticism, decide if one agrees or disagrees and then absorb or reject--something I have yet to master! LOL.

I don't think they are totally OOC. People are very multi-faceted and that is what partly makes fanfiction so fun to me--it allows us to explore real human emotions--'dark' and 'light'--with characters that we love.

Your writing is great! I think you could be very successful at a multichapter story--just plan out a loose outline for each chapter to the end and give it a try! Even a few chapters is great. Actually, I like it when there are only a few, shorter chapters.

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Mawwwwww jadenflame December 31 2009, 08:26:37 UTC
That was so cute! It'd be great if this ever had a follow up to it. Was happily suprised at the Wolf/Shori, I don't offten think of them together. But seeing Conrad and Yurri's feelings would be great too.

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