Beginning's End -- Chapter 2

[kitsukikun]

Title: Beginning's End
Series: Naruto
Pairing: NaruSasuNaru
Author: Kit
Rating: Hard M
Genre: Romance (Grad Student AU)
Wordcount: 5480
Summary: His sun would rise and set in those blue eyes, but Uchiha Sasuke would always admire him secretly. His best friend was straight and madly in love with his soon-to-be fiancee. But a little trouble in

Comments

[anonymous]

Omg. I love this story so much already. the characterization is great. And the conversations between Sasuke and Naruto are heartbreaking. They feel so realistic. And I can feel their pain and their desperation to try and close the distance between them that Sakura is creating. I was too lazy to sign in so this comment is anonymous, but please keep writing! You're doing a wonderful job!

[kitsukikun]

Thank you so much for your kind words. Chapter three is in the works :)

[lug_ar]

Absolutely LOVE it!
I had to prepare for my finals these past few weeks and was always checking if there was a new chapter of you to cheer me up a bit :D
Although there was no "real" sex scene, I was stunned how good the characterization was and how well it fitted with Sasuke( the dark part...) and Naruto.
I also found the whole butterfly part hilarious :D As a swimmer I know how hard it can be but I never actually humped someone to teach this style: so funny!
Please keep on writing, it is so hard to find something as well written and gripping as your fic and I totally adore it <3

[kitsukikun]

Aww, thanks for the review. :) I'm glad to know someone is looking forward to my writing. I've never humped / been humped in the making of the butterfly, but I think it could be kind of cool... :) Dunno how effective...

Again, thanks for taking the time to review :)

[kitsukikun]

yeah, angst... it's what I do. I don't think I could write an unangsty story, despite being a relatively angst-free person. Anyway, thanks so much for your review :)

[mija711]

Omg like the last one this chapter was totally amazing, I loved the dialouge between Sasuke and Naruto, and oh ya even I could feel the change the moment Sakura walked in, but was she jealous of Naruto hugging Sasuke or Sasuke hugging Naruto her boyfriend, seems like she is far more upset about Sasuke being with Juugo and hugging Naruto than her own boyfriend, poor Naruto and does he even SEE that in Sakura? because if he does why the heck does he still want to be with that woman? God I hope Sasuke DOES try to break thme up, and lol, I love the swimming pool scene Naruto was such a kid, watch me Ok Sasuke! lol, and humping Sasuk in the water, hmm wonder if Naruto was conscience of it as well or he actually thought he was TEACHING him lol, because his voice did drop down to almost husky lol, and why does Sasu put up with it if it tortures him to see all the delicous eye candy when he cant have it YET..and ahh he poor wittle abs, he is such a baby, but I loved that, I myself would have been crying by that time lol, two hours ohhh hell

[kitsukikun]

I love how this review is one long, run on sentence. <3 (that's how I think too!) I think my story is pretty much driven by dialogue, so I'm glad to know it works. :) And you're right, Sakura was jealous that Sasuke gives Naruto affection, not the other way around. I guess I should make that more clear. I know Sakura is coming out like a total bitch now, but I hope I can make her into a real person in the rest of the story. I know I've been in Sakura's shoes (kind of) where I was staying with someone I cared about because it was comfortable, rather than because I really loved them... of course, I wasn't in love with their best friend... or with anyone. hmm... Also, I'm glad Karin and Sui are coming out well. I'm afraid to make them too over the top. :P Anyway, thanks for taking the time to write such a long review! I live off of these. <3

[mija711]

lol I apologize for the run on sentence thingy...ya I tend to type the same way I talk and believe me when motivated, or not lol, I soo talk like that...sorry, but I get so excited when I read a good fic, as for Sakura your making her emotions clear, I just wanted to emphasize it in my own babble, lol, and I adore Sui and Karin love the way you make them and the way they get along with Sasu and both dont mind sharing, omg the jealousy Sasuke felt when they wanted to take Naru home with them omg I laughed butt off, ok, thanks again, huggles and smiles Mija..:-)

[aquarian_days]

I like this so far. The best part about it for me is that I feel equal sympathy for both Sasuke and Naruto. I think they are both in tough spots. Sasuke's desperate, unrequited love makes me sad, but I can't admire his self-destructiveness. I feel sad for Naruto watching his important friend slip from between his fingers, but I can't admire the fact that he's let things go on with Sasuke like this for four years. (It's sad that Sasuke has been living a double life under Naruto's nose for all this time without Naruto noticing it. He's had more opportunities than most since they live together.) I also like how you are trying to keep all the character's emotions realistic and true to life. No one is melodramatically flailing around

[kitsukikun]

Haa hooo! A long review! (I become excited very easily) Thanks for taking the time. :)

You know, it's actually really hard to make a two sided story with a character like Sasuke. He's such an ass! Then, of course, I started to make it go too much in the other direction. *sigh* Anyway, I'm glad to know that it's working. :) Also, I'll continue to try to keep a lid on the emotional flailing.

Thanks again for the review. See you in chapter three!