Dammit. Your story almost made me CRY!! Humph. Anywas, I love it, as always. And, as I ahve previously mentioned, I think you have great use of the language and I commend you on it. *hands Kat a picture of Orli for reward* Only one critique I have is
"He came upon the body of a beheaded Nazgûl and looked on it in wonder. What great swordsman did this deed? He wondered."
Maybe find a different word for 'wondered' the second time. Like pondered, or questioned...you get the idea.
Hobbit bread crust is equivalent to rocks, no? A fellow Harry (joke intended) Ishmaelite wishes to leave you with these random statements:
Remember? Tig, tag, tog? If you tag Kat you have to moon someone? And you can't tig on a tog? Gwen's house? Dom and Billy made it up and Elijah thought it was a real game? I tagged Gwen, and she togged me, my only option was to tag you. Thus, you have been tagged and no-one has been mooned.
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"He came upon the body of a beheaded Nazgûl and looked on it in wonder. What great swordsman did this deed? He wondered."
Maybe find a different word for 'wondered' the second time. Like pondered, or questioned...you get the idea.
Hobbit bread crust is equivalent to rocks, no? A fellow Harry (joke intended) Ishmaelite wishes to leave you with these random statements:
"LOOK! THE PAPERWIEGHT OF DOOM!"
TAG. ::Hah. My pants are intact!::
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And I'm totally flattered! I can't believe I almost made you cry!! ::glomp:: I didn't think it was that good! ^^ ::glomp again::
[I can't type either. Don't worry about it :3]
...Did I just say 'totally'? O_o;;;; I think the Two Towers exteded DVD has taken over my brain.
....what about your pants?! o_O;;;;;;
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XD
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