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[kixxa]

I finished off my kids story and sent it out for comments/beta yesterday. (Thanks again to the guys who put their hands up!) Now, I'm feeling kinda lost and lonely. You see, somewhere amongst the dialogue and action, those rag-tag characters of mine became my friends, and I need to find out what's going to happen next in their lives. And, as they

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[graeco_celt]

I've started it but it's slow going, as it buggers my neck sitting at the laptop too long. Think I'm gonna have to bite the bullet and go down to the shop to print it out.

I wanted to ask you, though, whether you want a read through and general opinion? Or an anally grammatical assessment? Or both? :D

[kixxa]

I'm sorry about your poor neck! I hope that you enjoy the story and the torture is worth it!! *g*

Thanks for doing this for me, baby. And, just a read-through and a general opinion would be fine. If you do catch a glaring grammatical error, maybe make a note of it. I'm really looking for stuff like -- pacing, too short? too long? needs more? makes sense? too politically incorrect? too overwritten?

Hee! No pressure at all!! *g*

:)

[50mm]

ah ha ha ha your icon! HI-larious! Oh Ron...