Angst

[kizzy7]

I remember, from those early days of secret kisses and locked cupboards and forbidden looks, I remember most clearly her hair. Swirls of curls, I used to say, whispering in her ear. She’d jab me sharply in the side, for that, but-and don’t tell anyone, dear paper-but I enjoyed making her shake with anger.

Trying to commit all this down now, all

Comments

[lulabelle72]

That. Was. Gorgeous.

I've got no other words for it.

You stayed true to the our mutual mood last night, yes, but it's so much more.

You know what. I'll come back. Because I am at a loss as to what to say about this devastatingly beautiful piece.

[kizzy7]

"Devastatingly beautiful piece." You know, every time you say something lovely about my writing, I grin like a fool. Being so complimented by one of my favorite authors--and not just of fanfiction, but all around authors--still just means so much! *silly grin*

Thank you! Yes, I was definitely feeling teh angst last night ;-)

[mimimanderly]

Wah....!! This was so beautiful and so sad! ...And yet I have to hold back the tears until Paul leaves for work; he'd never understand why I'm getting all weepy over fanfiction.

You should write more, Kizzy dear. You write beautifully!

[kizzy7]

Oh, Mimi, thank you! You know, I must admit, I got a bit weepy writing it. But I was emotional all around last night, lol! Yeah, Kevin never understands either when or why I am moved by fanfic.

I wish I would write more too, lol! Thank you, that means so much!

And THANKS for the calender, I love it.

[mimimanderly]

You are very welcome, my dear!

[lulabelle72]

All right, I'm back, with a clear head.

What I love most is how authentic Snape sounds in this. You've really managed to capture his voice without doing anything... fangirl, or fanfic-ish to it. I absolutely heard this in his voice all the way through.

the tang of days-old preservation charms -- a perfect line. Why? Because it shows how deeply you were into his head; its these kinds of details that make a piece more than the sum of its words, that raise it to another level. I read that and was stunned. Silly for just a few words? No, not at all.

I love how she, in typical Granger fashion, mourned for her inability to have children and then decided, like that, that it was time to stop mourning and move on. That is just so Hermione.

And I love how Snape snarks that people should have asked him how he lived with her! Fantastic.

The description of the potion swirling in the amber of the whisky. Beautiful and another detail that shows you fully imagined this world.

This is powerful and wonderful. You should be proud of yourself.

[kizzy7]

*blushes*

I... I am somewhat speechless! Thank you so much for such a stunning review!

The thing that makes me happiest is that you think I stayed true to his character. You know, I almost never write in first person, it terrifies me because it can oh so easily turn out badly. But here, I just had to! It was one of those rare pieces that just flowed easily for me, like I was just writing what had already happened. I also was in quite an angsty mood, lol!

As always, I treasure your words. Thank you!

[christev]

Kizzy, this is amazing, absolutely fantastic. It's sad and celebratory at the same time. I wasn't always focused on his grief, but on the love he had for her, the love they shared together. Very powerfully written.

[kizzy7]

Thank you, christev!

"I wasn't always focused on his grief, but on the love he had for her..." YES, that makes me so happy! I really wanted to portray such a relationship through his words that was still alive, still love and reality for him. I'm so glad that came through!

[neelix_2000]

This was so full of pathos and so evocative. I could see Hermione in her tomb, and almost feel her curls between my fingertips.

Wonderfully, beautifully written.

I think this is the best thing I have read from you. Fantastic.

In fact - I would PAY to read this!

[kizzy7]

Hmmm, how much?

~waggles eyebrows suggestively~

LOL! Thank you so much, what a compliment, m'dear! ((hugs))