Kaoru's Hair Ribbon
OK guys, here it is. I'm not saying it's good. You should feel honored, Wizard hasn't seen this yet!! And this was supposed to be for her b-day. I am in soooooo much trouble!! I should probably let her read it. Tell me what you think, be honest!! If you haven't watched anymore of the show than what I showed you, you will be confused. This ( Read more... )
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I say that the characters wouldn't necessarily react this way. You should re-write it again, and make it funnier. Like, Kaoru doesn't like pink or something, and Sano and Yahiko fall out of the trees. And then Kaoru finds out the plan and ends up throwing things at them all or hitting them. I think that would be much funnier. Just some suggestions.
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And yeah, funny is always better!! good job for one of your first writings though! well I assume it's one of your firsts cause i've never read anything else by you...
Anyway, we'll help you tomorrow!!
BTW...Jenny's gonna be at my house at like...10:30...which means we'll probably randomly show up at your house at like 11. ish. depending on when we leave and stuff.
But you probably won't read this in time...
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