Fic: Chance in Hell, Part 6

[ehmaz]

Title: Chance in Hell, Part 6
Author: ehmaz
Characters: Patrick/Joker
Rated: NC-17
Disclaimer: I don't own these characters.
Warnings: Violence and murder, as always, hah.
Summary: Five days after their encounter in the Cadillac. Things didn't end so happily after all... can they still?
Notes: 4021 words. Sorry it's been so long since the last chapter.

Comments

[kayoshybrid]

God, I've been waiting for this chapter soo looonggg that I forgot about the story; but now I'm back and HOLY-- it's never stopped being incredible. I seriously get shortness of breath just from one damn chapter.

I feel sooo bad for Patrick; he's so broken up and frantic, some sort of neglected puppy. He craves attention and he'll roll over and accept abuse because he craves it that much. He needs assurances but he just wasn't getting any, finally getting pulled too thin and leaving.

I love how Joker still thinks of him; not in a fluffy way, but a possessive way, and kind of all over the place from the distraction. He doesn't feel remorse or regret, but he certainly knows when something isn't to his liking.

I'm prolly gonna say 'I loved how' to fucking everything, like Patrick finally not seeking the Joker aftering being abandoned, at least recognising that he was being abused a bit too much (as fragile as he is D;). It was relieving that he kinda got out of a domestic, not so unhappy/apprehensive/nervous/numb/embarrassed all the

[ehmaz]

Thank you so much, I really appreciate all of the feedback! And yes, I totally agree that the 'Jack' in there at the end is disconcerting and doesn't feel quite right... I actually did that intentionally believe it or not. The thing I love about this pairing is that their relationship is so uncomfortable. That's why I had that horrid, un-erotic scene with Patrick and Joker in the chair and Pat getting cut and not even enjoying it, same reason I stuck 'Jack' in at the end. I don't want the reader to be too comfortable with the pairing because I don't think the characters are either.

Feel free to call bullshit if you want, I don't mind XD That was my reasoning though. Again thank you so much for your comment and all the feedback, it's so nice ^_^ Sorry it took so long to get this chapter up. I kinda didn't realize people were waiting for it and wasn't working on it.... >_>

[kayoshybrid]

Oh my gawd, wow, you have no idea how impressed I am that the uncomfortable scenes were intentional to induce that! I love stuff like that, with any artform; literature, film, image - being able to unsettle but still hook a reader is a talent I hold in high regard

[rekindle956]

He could still see perfectly the single, small step Patrick had taken backwards. in more ways than one.

You know I have been following the story from the start and I will continue to do so until we reach the conclusion that you feel is satisfactory.

Everything is so great, I love Price and Coldplay.

I truly enjoy this series and eagerly await for the chapters to come, yet I don't want to seem pushy. Thank you for writting this and sharing it with us.