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[knowledge3754]

I havent played wit poetry in years. this is my second try since rediscovering poetry. if u wonderin about the rhythm dont hurt urself trynna figure it out, some parts im spittin like a rhyme, others im speakin. if i ever record it ill be sure to let yall know so yall can see how it sounds. peace, all comments/hate/criticism welcome.

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[insolence624]

I don't want to say banal shit like this shit's mad tight, you gotta do it again
I'm feeling it like my skin man, matter of fact I even managed to see the rhythm quite well, I think this might well become a great song. Conscious songs still seem fake sometimes, but this is deep like ... I ain't got words to express it all.
I ain't like "you're my favorite poet cuz this shit is great", but this made me think a lotta things over, and for a poet that's something))
Thanks anyway)

[knowledge3754]

surprised that u could get the rhythm. not that i think its complex or that ur dumb, just i know the rhythm is kinda weird at parts, sometimes still confuses me cuz i havent worked it all out yet. high praises for ur comments and compliments. thanks man

[insolence624]

yeah, the rhythm changes throughout the poem of course, but i don't think that's something bad, but right now I'm re-reading it and I'm seeing the rhythm (think Vast Aire-like-off-beat stuff)
them lyrics is deep and u used some clever stuff to think over, matter of fact, I'm a put it on my info page))
shit now I'm feeling like a dickrider, damn