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[kodachikunai]

oh yeah...

here ya go:

It's roses. Completed. And unedited. So expect it to suck. Hope this works...

Comments

[pseudo_villain]

Michelle... you are a genius, you know that?

Although, at times it's a teensy bit hard to remember who's talking. I'm not quite sure how you could rememdy that, since it would destroy the flow of the style it's written in...

[kodachikunai]

Shanleigh....

you're so nice to me....*sniffles*

*writes down: get shanleigh something pretty.*

[sfdreamer153]

Yeah like a Grr t-shirt(or sweatshirt) to match her beanie

[sfdreamer153]

YOu realize daffodils are weeds right?

[kodachikunai]

I like flowers...they're pretty...

...but flower names on the other hand, I hate. Cause I can NEVER remember them. Daffodils were the only thing I could think of.

[sfdreamer153]

Try like...violets, or tulips or lilac

[kodachikunai]

O.o

How did I foget violets?! I grow violets!!

baka, baka michelle...

[sfdreamer153]

Ok it may be stupid but i'm gonna tel the truth...I love the begining but in the newest part something is...off...I don't know I can't put my finger on it but...

[kodachikunai]

EH...try to figure out what's off and tell me....

...I need critism...so lost on this one...

...I kinda like it, kinda hate it.

[kodachikunai]

oh and alex...I don't hate you...The adice is helpful, since I thought the end was off, too. especially the very last section.

[sfdreamer153]

Good

[kodachikunai]

Did you figure out what was 'off' yet?