Kingdom Hearts Kink Meme

[kokanshu]

KINGDOM HEARTS KINK MEME

Indexed at kh-kinkmeme
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Rules:

1. Post a pairing plus a kink.

1a. One request per comment.

1b. The only kink not allowed on this meme is anything involving underage sex. What I mean by this is if, either in the request or fic, it is made clear (either by stating a number or giving a physical description) that

Comments

the Down Low (1/?)

[anonymous]

Has never actually written porn before, so i hope it's not *too* terrible XD

the Down Low (2/?)

[anonymous]

"You're doin' it all wrong!" He chirped, bending over quite a bit to have their faces almost even. "Let me take care of it, you just keep you're eyes open, got it

Re: the Down Low (3/4)

[anonymous]

“What do you think I’m doing?” He gave Roxas’ groin a firm squeeze, making the younger nobody jump sluggishly

Re: the Down Low (4/4)

[anonymous]

“You’re so hot Roxas..” Axel panted from above, his fingers squeezing the blonde’s hips with force that would surely leave marks. “I’m gonna come in your tight little ass... will you come for me?” He was pulling Roxas back to meet his thrusts, the light body like a toy in his hands as he grew closer and closer to orgasm

OP

[anonymous]

OMG that was... amazing! Exactly what I wanted! Thank you so much :D

some concrit

[anonymous]

You had a good approach going -- the strangeness of the world and Axel's behavior and whatnot. You had a good setting and your syntax was okay (that'll come with more practice).

The story needs more... smoothness. Subtlety. I had to go back a few times to try and piece together why Axel and Roxas were suddenly panting and out of breath, how did Axel lubricate his finger, when did he become erect, etc. I see that you tried to prompt the sex with Axel's "you know, I've been thinking," but it's much more of a natural feeling to ease into the sex. Your reader shouldn't be questioning the way events piece together because it means that you've lost them.

Otherwise, good work. It'll all come naturally with practice!

Re: some concrit

[anonymous]

writer!anon here. Sorry for the fail, like i said ive never tried writing it before :/ Could be worse, It will hopefully get better in the future!

Re: some concrit

[anonymous]

No no it was a good first attempt! You should keep writing~ (you should see my first attempt, it was not nearly as good as this lmao)

Re: the Down Low (4/4)

[anonymous]

Oh boy, the humor in this. It had me snickering all along.