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yunho1205 June 16 2010, 01:40:55 UTC
Oooooo!! Who saved Jae?? Was it Yunho??? :)

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lovelysasusaku October 9 2010, 20:03:35 UTC
Hello~
First time reading this fic and I decided to leave a comment.
What I would recommend you is to include quotation marks in your fic. that'd make the text well-arranged and the readers would enjoy their time reading more.
it's just a recommendation, not something you have to do.
I enjoy reading your fic anyway now;)
thanks for your hard work!

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kokoromiya7 October 9 2010, 21:22:18 UTC
Hello there ^^
No worries, I don't mind when people leave me recommendations or critics as long as it's useful and not just mean :) but I don't really get what you mean when you say that I should include quotations marks ? ^^" sorry I'm a bit stupid maybe but would you mind explaining it to me ? :S
anyway, thanks for reading and commenting :D

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lovelysasusaku October 9 2010, 21:37:05 UTC
Well..
example:
"I love you", Jae said, "but I cannot be with you!."
something like that.
Because I have troubles to tell everything apart.
I hope you are not mad >_<
I just think it'd be better to mark the parts when the characters are talking.
something like this is alright as well..
'I love you', Jae said,'but I cannot be with you.'
just that we know, what acutally he is thinking/talking and what are the descriptions.

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kokoromiya7 October 9 2010, 21:51:00 UTC
Oh ok I get it now. And of course I'm not mad, don't worry ^^ But actually there is a reason why I wrote it this way, in fact I did it the french way, since I'm french, and we usually don't separate the same way as english do (I don't if I'm very clear here :S). But I will try to correct when I've more time and maybe do it as you said from now on :) thanks for your advice.

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mizz_art November 5 2010, 20:07:18 UTC
good job hero, although u work as a host, that doesn't mean u a whore...fight jj, fight...
i guess that's yh who come to save him rite...now going to read next chapter....

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kokoromiya7 November 5 2010, 21:10:06 UTC
you commented here too, waouh, thanks :D
haha you guessed right ^^ I suck at suspense, I'm such a fail XD

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wox666 February 8 2011, 19:10:10 UTC
YUNHO ???!!!

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dinieluvyunho May 22 2011, 12:36:26 UTC
wanna read moreee...

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