snsd, jessica/tiffany
anonymous
April 12 2011, 19:22:30 UTC
this is very, very vaguely inspired by the second picture prompt. cosmetic surgery fic ahoy!
"It's okay," Jessica assures her quietly, petting clumsily at her right hip, but Tiffany shifts underneath the bed covers, legs writing surreal like quilted vines, and shoves her face into the pillow. Jessica hears tiny hitches of breath, like she's not quite sobbing, and her shoulders quake in minute increments when Jessica lays a hand across the narrow length between them. Tiffany has been shedding her weight at snakeskin rapidity lately, and it's apparent in everywhere but her mouth, full and soft, and the spaces behind her ears where Jessica will flick to capture her attention. Even her nose looks a little slimmer, streamlined.
"No, it's not," she moans miserably, and she smacks Jessica's wandering hand away when it reaches around her shoulders and to her throat. "I feel so - so ugly now!" she wails
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yonghwa/onew (c.n.blue/shinee)
anonymous
April 12 2011, 19:29:09 UTC
inspired by 6. because that yonghwa/onew thread above had me craving for some fic. also, uh, hi, first time ever posting a challenge response."would you just-", yonghwa stops mid-sentence as he puts his head in his hands, fingers rubbing at his temples
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Re: yonghwa/onew (c.n.blue/shinee)
anonymous
April 12 2011, 20:11:22 UTC
(i hope this won't discourage you from participating in more challenges...)
maybe it's because you went right into the middle of the story and offered little context besides their performance, but i'm having a hard time seeing them interact this way :\ they almost seem like indistinguishable characters, or like they're on the set of queer as folk. i think this would work with people who have more of a backstory but because there isn't much of one for them, you really have to take it upon yourself to create that and weave it into the fic.
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"It's okay," Jessica assures her quietly, petting clumsily at her right hip, but Tiffany shifts underneath the bed covers, legs writing surreal like quilted vines, and shoves her face into the pillow. Jessica hears tiny hitches of breath, like she's not quite sobbing, and her shoulders quake in minute increments when Jessica lays a hand across the narrow length between them. Tiffany has been shedding her weight at snakeskin rapidity lately, and it's apparent in everywhere but her mouth, full and soft, and the spaces behind her ears where Jessica will flick to capture her attention. Even her nose looks a little slimmer, streamlined.
"No, it's not," she moans miserably, and she smacks Jessica's wandering hand away when it reaches around her shoulders and to her throat. "I feel so - so ugly now!" she wails ( ... )
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...i'm just trying to decipher now what your sadface means haha
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maybe it's because you went right into the middle of the story and offered little context besides their performance, but i'm having a hard time seeing them interact this way :\ they almost seem like indistinguishable characters, or like they're on the set of queer as folk. i think this would work with people who have more of a backstory but because there isn't much of one for them, you really have to take it upon yourself to create that and weave it into the fic.
i hope that wasn't too harsh.
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i liked it though :)
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....bending over durrhurr
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