Comments | krisrussel: I need your opinion

krisrussel

I need your opinion

Jan 29, 2009 20:53

Chapter 1: How things change

It had been two years since Atlantis had landed on Earth. Two years since his life had drastically changed. Two years since he had fought teeth and nail to keep his home, his friends, his all and had lost. Two years since the IOA had decided to keep Atlantis on Earth and make it a purely scientific base without the ( Read more... )

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Comments 11

anuna_81 January 29 2009, 20:43:06 UTC

Darling,

I still didn't read it. I have no frakking time. I am so sorry for that. *sad*

krisrussel January 29 2009, 20:47:56 UTC

lol, no problem, I understand you're busy... and this is a completely different unrelated story btw ;)

yunadax January 29 2009, 21:56:16 UTC

Definately continue! It's a very insightful little fic you have here :)

I'm glad I'm not the only one who writes at work.....

krisrussel January 29 2009, 22:00:51 UTC

Thank you! And I will continue... bunny is keeping on a tight grip :-/

No, you're not the only one writing at work... there are days that I think I spend more time writing than actually working :-/

the_scary_kitty January 29 2009, 23:24:05 UTC

Poor John! The family's been broken up again ( ... )

krisrussel January 30 2009, 09:09:53 UTC

I know, I've been thinking about that too... what about the city? It just can't stay right outside of San Fransico as people WILL start getting suspicious. I'll prolly make a quick reference in the first chapter about it moving to a barely used part of ocean around the Artic ;^)

But I don't think I'll be going back to Atlantis in the story, John has severed nearly all ties with his previous life, so the chance of him returning is really really small, but then again, miracles do happen ;^)

the_scary_kitty January 30 2009, 22:38:38 UTC

*nods* Yeah, at least a quick line or two early on so that readers don't get hung up on wondering what happened would be enough.

Aw, no going to Atlantis? *pouts* Come on, miracles! John needs a snog from his Lizzie! :D

wanderingsmith January 30 2009, 00:46:13 UTC

oh dear, I should apologize for being instrumental to that bunny attack shouldn't I? lol

I like hte first chapter, the continued story you came up with, though I'd have liked it more.. intense I guess. more of how he feels -err, keep in mind.. I write emotional.. that doesn't mean its the beter way.. just the one *I* prefer.. lol, grain of salt and all that-

anyway, :) more of his reasons for liking a risky job. and then what hopes he does have for the future after he finds his new place.

and I can't wait to see how you bring elizabeth back :)

krisrussel January 30 2009, 09:12:33 UTC

Haha, don't worry about it... the plotbunny and the use of the quote are completely unrelated... dunno where the bunny came from to be honest, it just suddenly was there ;^)

I'm still wondering about Elizabeth's story... it's been going around in my head since the frakkin' bunny attacked... I just hope it works out ok...

flowerbud2 January 30 2009, 04:22:42 UTC

I liked it. The first chapter had a nice rhthym showing how isolated John slowly became. Overall, it had a melancholy and you did a nice job showing loss rather than stating it.

krisrussel January 30 2009, 09:13:38 UTC

Thank you, I'm glad you like it!
All these nice comments are really making me want to write more :^)