Comments | kristen0912: Well, this can't be good (Keith, Veronica, Logan) WIP

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Well, this can't be good (Keith, Veronica, Logan) WIP

May 22, 2008 01:46

Title: Well, this can't be good (WIP)
Author: Kristen
Pairing/Character: Keith, Veronica, Logan (mentions of ensemble)
Word Count: 2039
Rating: G
Summary: The seedier citizens of Neptune have temporarily acquired moral consciousness.
Spoilers: Futurefic, know the whole series
Warnings: None
Disclaimer: I am in no way associated with the owners, ( Read more... )

fanfiction, veronica mars

Comments 13

onceuponapillow May 22 2008, 20:13:57 UTC

I am loving this so far. I do love fics where Veronica and Keith actually talk...or start to talk.

I also like that Veronica is missing Logan and that Logan is moving on and doing soemthing that doesn't involve Veronica. I like it when he is his own man.

Can't wait for more.

anonymous May 23 2008, 00:42:54 UTC

This story has amazing potential. I'm excited to read about vulnerable Veronica. I also like when Logan has a life beyond Veronica. It's ridiculous to think that he lives his life solely for Veronica. With that said, I like that Veronica is still the go to girl for Logan when he needs help. I think that Logan and Veronica are going to be in each others life forever, in some sorta way. They are just to important to one another.
I love that Veronica is confiding on Keith. I think that Keith and Veronica need to communication with each other, because all of the secrets are making them get to paranoid. They need each other.

anifsemaj May 23 2008, 04:03:10 UTC

Very nice! I like the Veronica/Kieth interactions, I like Logan living life on his own two feet, waiting for more!!

starlaa79 May 23 2008, 07:20:31 UTC

Like the fic so far. Can't wait to read more. Love the interation between Veronia and Keith. Post soon
Jen

She writes! peznarski May 25 2008, 21:08:15 UTC

“We agreed we were better off as friends.”

Whatever happened to you using your powers for good? I'm smellin’ a lot of personal gain coming off of this sentence. :P

The Keith-centric P.O.V. of this fic is cool. I’m surprised you didn’t throw a little more 70’s lingo in there, just for fun.

I'm going to side with the hoi-polloi, here; the failed psych test is an excellent touch. Not at all obvious, but almost inescapable once the evidence comes to bear.

As always, you have a great eye for continuity, and the drop off points you provide for your readers are very satisfying in that respect, even if you do give Piz the pinch at every available turn. Rassa-frassin mutter mutter…I liked the scene you set in the paragraph where you mention Wallace's absence, and would really have liked to have seen you push a little farther in that direction. You started setting up a pretty well crafted narrative of the setting, and I think you could have built on it, embellishing to good effect. I know it’s not exactly your cup of tea, but you’ve got the ( ... )