Week 12: Salty

Mar 18, 2017 22:23

Renee was different. No. That word is all wrong. It makes it sound like she had a third arm coming out of her head. Renee was unique, a bit eccentric ( Read more... )

salty, ljidol, week 12

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beeker121 March 21 2017, 03:15:35 UTC
The ending was a gut punch, but one well-earned after all the beautiful set up of their friendship.

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kschlotwrites March 22 2017, 12:27:52 UTC

I wrestled with the ending. Did I want to do something a little super natural? Like maybe there really was an "other side."

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shadowwolf13 March 21 2017, 04:57:55 UTC
Shattering :'(

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kschlotwrites March 22 2017, 12:47:19 UTC

I was debating on making it more supernatural, or fantasy. But the words led me into this direction.

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rayaso March 21 2017, 21:18:44 UTC
This was marvelous, combining so many wonderfully done elements, especially Renee and her imagination. The ending was so sad. Very well done!

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kschlotwrites March 22 2017, 12:55:37 UTC

Thank you! At first, I was torn between this ending, and something more of fantasy. But this is where the writing led me.

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halfshellvenus March 22 2017, 19:34:53 UTC
I really liked the quirkiness of Renee, and yet I also understand why Marcie might come to feel embarrassed by her as she got older and Renee did not seem to.

I'm glad this was fiction, with that sad ending-- which still isn't necessarily unrealistic. Renee seemed to have such a strong, persistent relationship with what other people would consider fantasy that it occurred to me that she might have eventually bloomed into mental illness and truly found regular life too much to cope with.

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kschlotwrites March 23 2017, 13:38:55 UTC

Oh wow! That's the crazy thing about writing/reading. In my mind, Renee wasn't depressed. She was mentally ill, though. And believed she was getting herself to the other side.

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halfshellvenus March 23 2017, 17:08:35 UTC
She didn't come off as depressed to me, either. More like someone who might have been schizophrenic, and fully believed in the reality of something that others thought was a playful fantasy for her.

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dmousey March 23 2017, 13:22:43 UTC
Someone outwardly projecting as 'bouncy and quirky' is not immediately thought to be in emotional distress. They're easily overlooked, but sometimes they're the most tortured souls. ( Robin Williams immediately comes to mind.)

I enjoyed this, the ending wasn't much of a surprise to me- I actually was waiting for a terminal illness to be her demise. Whenever an author has a character speak of 'The Otherside' those characters usually end up there. Still, it impactful and reminds us to truly 'see' one another.

Hugs and peace~~~

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kschlotwrites March 23 2017, 14:42:42 UTC

I love this about writing and reading. That things can be interpreted in different ways. Writing this, I wasn't writing Renee as depressed. She definitely had a mental illness, though. She believed the stories she told, and thought this other side place existed.

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