Week 17: Blind Box: Never Mind

[kschlotwrites]

She wanted to call out, "I love you," as she was hurrying out the door. But she was running late and didn't want to have to repeat it if he didn't hear her the first time. Never mind, she thought. He knows.

She wanted to text him while she was waiting at a red light on Harper Street. But the light turned green. Never mind, she thought. I can text

Comments

[i_17bingo]

Well that's just heartbreaking! But I understand how loss can lead one down these paths.

[kschlotwrites]

I was thinking about my dad and my mother-in-law yesterday. My father has been gone for almost 10 years. My mother-in-law just passed in February. Thinking of them is probably what prompted me to go out in this direction. Thank you for reading!

[fodschwazzle]

I wonder if every line is addressed in the now, like she's realizing it all in the line. Definitely heartbreaking and meshes pretty well with the whole "missing staircase step" feeling of loss that I've become familiar with.

[kschlotwrites]

That is a good way to describe the sudden loss of someone

[rayaso]

Such a poignant end. I thought you had it set up for her love to die during the day, but you wrote a great twist for the end. Great job.

[kschlotwrites]

Thank you!

[tonithegreat]

I was expecting a twist, but not this twist! So sad, but it read very true. Well done.

[xlovebecomesher]

Heartbreaking :(