Week 19: Invitation

[kschlotwrites]

"Timmy, come back here where I can see you," I called to my energetic four-year-old at the playground, as I pushed his two-year-old sister in a swing

Comments

[rayaso]

The Stepford moms! This was a creepy, dark and fun idea, and the pacing was great. What intense pressure to conform, but over the number of children???

[kschlotwrites]

Thank you.

I had mentioned in a previous comment that I've had the idea of this for years. I used to work at a carousel in the local mall, and saw many play dates. Sometimes my mind wandered and I had the general idea of a backstory.

[eternal_ot]

Wow! This was creepy and fantastic at the same time. Great read!

[kschlotwrites]

Thank you!

[beeker121]

One of us - one of us.

I'm glad Katelyn figured out the creepy and never joined. This had a slow build from nice to Stepford that worked really well.

[kschlotwrites]

Thank you. Katelyn is lucky she sensed the situation before she was too late!

[marlawentmad]

Oh, man, this turned way darker than I expected!

[kschlotwrites]

It does get a bit creepy!

[encrefloue]

Oh man, that was bone-chilling. I'm so curious about the formation and ideology of the Mothers of Two! There's gotta be some perverted logic hiding under the surface. Great job!