A response to 2DTeleidoscope's writing challenge.

[kuroshin]

Here is my response to 2DT's writing challenge that he issued on Twitter. Here's his requirements.

The game: Write 300-500 words of anything, but you must incorporate the phrase "explore in silent rhythm the curse"

Here's my hopefully okay writing. What are your thoughts about it? I'd like to receive comments!

Comments

[breyzyyin]

Oh wow...I really liked it. I thought the imagery and description in it was incredible. You wrote a really moving piece, I think! ♥ :)

[kuroshin]

Wow, I never thought it as moving since I just wrote the thing in 30 minutes flat and I felt kinda dissatisfied in my output. Thank you! ♥

[kurikuribebi]

Honest opinion?
It was interesting! Though I have two small questions.

1. I thought you had to use the exact phrase your friend had given you? If so, I didn't see it. If the task was to construct a story around that phrase, you did a good job =).

2. Did you purposely re-use the word curse over and over in order to tie it back to the original statement? It felt just a tad repetitive.

[kuroshin]

Personally, I really don't feel good about my output. I just kinda rushed it and wrote the whole thing in about 30 minutes. I did used the word curse repeatedly for emphasis. Thanks for your comment, it was quite helpful! :D