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[diru69]

Title:  Bring Me Back                
Author:  diru69
Rating:  PG-13, i guesszzzzzz
Chapter: 1/1  (oneshot)
Disclaimer:  I DONT FUCKING OWN THEM *EMOTEAR*
Summary:  Toshiya can't feel anything anymore.  No pain, no happiness, nothing.  Kyo has to do something about it.
A/N:  Because I got extremely bored with my other fanfiction >.<  this is just a onesy

Comments

[inbrilliantgrey]

Awwww!
Poor baby, I wanted to hug him, but you know, Kyo kinda did the job there.

[diru69]

omg dude, so you ARENT dead XD
lol

[jikhyun]

awww that was sadly sweet.

[diru69]

thx ^^ oh dude I
forgot, I'm supposed to give
ppl cookies for commenting
*gives you cookie* *you too, sam*

[x_chrizzl3_x]

Oh god, my throat tightened. That only happens when I read something really emotional. I was totally feeling every single emotion in this, it was just coming at me in waves. God, you made me want to cry with this. It was good, you just have this way with words...the imagery was nice, the way you described things. It's a little rough around the edges, but that's what practicing is for.

I'm serious though, I really liked this. It was a good piece. Don't you dare stop writing, you're only going to get better from here.

[diru69]

really? you dont know
how much that means :)
I kinda get what you're talking about though,
I was re-reading this and some of the sentences
were too short and there's a repitition in a lotta
places. thanks, btw ^^

[x_chrizzl3_x]

Yeah, really. It hit me right there, y'know? Yeah, but if you just keep practicing, I know you'll get better. You've got a lot of potential, babe. C: You're very welcome. You just keep at it!

[diru69]

until then, I have this
wonderful excuse for my
writing's uckiness...
it goes "I'm 14!" ...
Okay, so there rly ISNT an
excuse, but still!