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[la_muse]

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[selkie14]

Yeah right, like anyone's going to not read it when you say "don't read!"

That's pretty cool. You've done some really unusual things with your words that I totally dig. Your writing style reminds me of purple lightning in the desert. You know what I mean? Something very dark and static-y and tense.

Totally neat.

[la_muse]

Gah! Thwarted by reverse psychology!

[beckeromatic]

I agree with Charlotte about lightning, of course. Because maybeyoudidn'tknowit but Char& I are the same.

[omfgemo]

You spelled "secretes" wrong unless I misunderstand that sentence. I like the juxtaposition of the narrative and the comments about it (e.g. "Not all of this is a lie", "My sentences are too long"). The last sentence is unattractive because there is no appealing way to spell "goddamn". What is this written for? p.s. good job

[la_muse]

This is written for me because I don't like my writing but the only way to get better (they say) is to practice, practice and post, but I can't help but insert disclaimers.
Also, no I do not want that extra e on my secrets, thank you very much, since when do people secrete bruises? gross.

PS. And thank you for not being mean <3

[omfgemo]

maybe if they're infect with staph aureus, and they're full of furuncles and carbuncles, and then those abscesses bursts or something.

[omfgemo]

I don't understand what the sentence means then.

[haptic]

I always forget how bone-long his hands are, Jamais thinks. Hands define a person, and his flatly state, “of course.” When she slides into a chair opposite him, he doesn’t smile in greeting. She has always been there.I always forget how bone-long his hands are, Jamais thinks. Hands define a person, and his flatly state, “of course.” When she slides into a chair opposite him, he doesn’t smile in greeting. She has always been there.I always forget how bone-long his hands are, Jamais thinks. Hands define a person, and his flatly state, “of course.” When she slides into a chair opposite him, he doesn’t smile in greeting. She has always been there.I always forget how bone-long his hands are, Jamais thinks. Hands define a person, and his flatly state, “of course.” When she slides into a chair opposite him, he doesn’t smile in greeting. She has always been there.I always forget how bone-long his hands are, Jamais thinks. Hands define a person, and his flatly state, “of course.” When she slides into a chair opposite him, he doesn’t smile in

[la_muse]

thank you. you're welcome.