I like your idea that Harry is dreaming that he sitting idling by while Draco casually starts the war, that his relationship with Draco could be complicit in all this.
I might consider re-writing the last paragraph -- I had to reread it twice to realize that it was indeed all a dream. Maybe just put a paragraph break before the last sentence.
There are a lot of nice details in this: the shopkeepers spelling their burglar alarms, their picnic, the books.
I'm so sorry to hear about your class-mate, how awful. yikes
Thanks! The last paragraph wasn't originally written to have all that be a dream, it was just him having a realization in his sleep, but I did realize it could be taken either way.I was thinking of re-writing it anyway, because I do like the idea I had for the ending, but I don't think I worded it very well. And thanks, it is horribly sad, I feel so bad for the family. (I hope this doesn't get posted twice because my computers being wonky, and I had to re-sumbit).
That was such a beautiful story. I agree with mizbean about Harry being a spectator to Draco's beginning the war. I actually took the ending as him making a realization in his sleep, as you said. Draco would be on the biggest adrenaline rush after that, and I love that Harry's on the line, not knowing which way to lean.
Oh, I know that feeling about losing someone from your school. It's horrible, and all my sympathy goes out for you, your classmates, and the family.
Thanks for the lovely comment! I kind of picture Harry knowing which side he's on, but if you throw Draco in the mix, and him being slightly resentful of his 'side' being already picked for him, and his destiny of sorts all ready planned out.
I didn't personally know the girl from my school, but it still is tragic, I feel bad for the family (like I said to Mizbean). They only moved to this area a couple months ago. Thanks for you're kind words.
hey, I just wanted to let you know that I found your challenges post on FA... and I completed a few of them. I did the Magical Music and A Glass Window challenges...I e-mailed you telling you that I did them, but you never wrote back...
I guess, if you'd like to read them, go to www.fanfiction.net/~scarecrowandgnome
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I like your idea that Harry is dreaming that he sitting idling by while Draco casually starts the war, that his relationship with Draco could be complicit in all this.
I might consider re-writing the last paragraph -- I had to reread it twice to realize that it was indeed all a dream. Maybe just put a paragraph break before the last sentence.
There are a lot of nice details in this: the shopkeepers spelling their burglar alarms, their picnic, the books.
I'm so sorry to hear about your class-mate, how awful. yikes
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And thanks, it is horribly sad, I feel so bad for the family.
(I hope this doesn't get posted twice because my computers being wonky, and I had to re-sumbit).
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Oh, I know that feeling about losing someone from your school. It's horrible, and all my sympathy goes out for you, your classmates, and the family.
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I didn't personally know the girl from my school, but it still is tragic, I feel bad for the family (like I said to Mizbean). They only moved to this area a couple months ago. Thanks for you're kind words.
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I guess, if you'd like to read them, go to www.fanfiction.net/~scarecrowandgnome
hope i didn't cause any disturbance...
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