Fic: Backstage

[ladye_black]

Title: Backstage
Author: Ladye Black
Pairing: Kyusung (KyuhyunxYesung)
Rating: NC-17
Genre: PWP
Length: ~900
Summary: After singing the acoustic version of ‘Bonamana’ with Yesung, Donghae, Sungmin, and Ryeowook; Kyuhyun corners Yesung in their dressing room.

A/N: I’m new to the fandom, so please forgive any errors or inconsistencies in how they address

Comments

[kingdra]

Yum! Pwp is always good :D I like that it's short and straight to the point. And anything with Kyuhyun and Yesung is always delightful.

A few things--
"Ready?” He asked - I feel like the "He" should be in lowercase, not capitalized. Probably a typo, considering that's the only time you made the mistake

[ladye_black]

No, no! Thank you! I dislike using names all of the time because it just sounds repetitive. Especially with only two characters. And like I said, first PWP, so I'm really used to writing longer fics where some thinking is required and there isn't so much back and forth, but more internal dialogue, so it's less confusing about who is doing what.

And that "HE" should totally be lowercase. That will get fixed then...as for the other, I will take your comments into consideration should I write more like this, but I probably won't fix that bit up too much, haha...XD

Again, thank you so much! Your comments were extremely helpful! ^_^

[amyooamla]

hyung no doubt is better than oppa since oppa is for female who address an older male. and this is such sexy fic, thanks for writing this! and welcome to the fandom! :)

[ladye_black]

Thank you! I'm so glad you liked it! (And I just find it weird because I am a girl; I keep wanting to write 'oppa' since that's what I'm used to, lol.)

[ninive]

Since you asked for corrections I hope you won't mind.

I don't think Yesung could be considered a 'sunbae' for Kyuhyun, he technically is considering he did debut before him but since they're both in the same group I don't think it applies.
Also Ryeowook isn't a 'hyung' for Kyuhyun. On a foreigner point of view Kyuhyun is one year younger than Ryeowook, but not for koreans who use the chinese calendar for ages (confusing, I know). Kyuhyun was born in February, before the chinese new year so he's considered born in '87 and the same age as Ryeowook.

BTW I loved your story, I just wish it was longer.