the passages by the mother, need some polishing. your using your voice instead of giving her one of her own. For example: ... ", by tradition I had to give her the pin. I didn’t want to give it up though." It makes me think of someone young speaking, not a mother/adult. I don't think that "I took it" works, maybe you could try something else. And there are some grammatical errors in there. Anyway, those are my thoughts. It was well written. Lovely job babe. How is my sara -you- who doing? ready for college?
thanks much for your input yea grammer stuff i haven't gotten around to yet...the final wi.ll fix that stuff. me i am stressed tired and don't want to go to school anymore. yuck ahhh you said the c word, i don't even want to hear it. It is driving me up a wall and around the bend
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me i am stressed tired and don't want to go to school anymore. yuck
ahhh you said the c word, i don't even want to hear it. It is driving me up a wall and around the bend
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