Look After Your Brother ch 17

May 12, 2005 17:18


Chapter 17 )

bds, layb

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boondockhottie May 12 2005, 22:22:57 UTC
What happened to Chap 16?

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ladyjanelly May 12 2005, 23:35:22 UTC
My bad. Forgot to archive it on my lj. It's on the bds comm. I'll find it and archive it when I finish the movie I'm watching with the hubby.

Sorry about that.

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boondockhottie May 12 2005, 23:48:22 UTC
Thats okay...

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ladyjanelly May 13 2005, 00:31:33 UTC
Okay, its up now. backdated it to the 4th.

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4bdnsn0wflake May 13 2005, 03:39:15 UTC
I think you've really tightened up this chapter, and it's much clearer now, and so, so very sad and packing an emotional punch.

It's so painful to see how much these men care about each other, but how they are distancing themselves, even in contact like this, because they can't face their deeper feelings.

Murphy turned his face down once more, his shoulders tensed, a shiver tracing his spine.

^ Don't think I mentioned before that I love this line and image.

"They fucken did it wrong." The familiar petulance flared in Murphy's voice.

^ This is so fucking Murphy. I love this moment.

Connor slid his fingers through his brother's hair, held his face close and safe against his chest.

"There's not a thing in this world I'd deny ya. Y'know that don't ya?" He dragged his thumb over the worst of the marks, to see if it was something he could give to Murphy, something Murphy could accept from him.

A shuddering sigh was an answer to the question he didn't ask.

"Take whatcha need, Murph." He whispered.^ I think this plays much more ( ... )

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Again anonymous May 14 2005, 15:50:13 UTC
Another really good one i love it keep it going

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grackles July 30 2007, 22:26:51 UTC
Connor expected Murphy to be loud when the moment came upon him, "fuck the neighbors" crying out his joy or at least his release. The strangled little noises he heard instead almost broke his heart.

Man, that is just heartbreaking.

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ladyjanelly July 31 2007, 00:24:12 UTC
Thanks.

Is it vain of me to almost want to go read my own fic again now? :)

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grackles July 31 2007, 13:01:14 UTC
Nah, go read the thing!

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grackles July 31 2007, 14:25:35 UTC
Oh hey, I have a recs journal, I just put links to a bunch of your fics on it and then I thought, hey, would you be interested in fic recs? Most of them are older stories because I am new to the SPN stories but sometimes when I troll rps and wincest comms I find one no one has seen before.

The journal is callacalyx.

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