I tried so hard to get this down to a formal 100-word drabble but it refused to work out that way.
Glad you liked it though. I wrote it and then thought "this is too far out of 'character,'" but then I went and re-read the prologue/first chapter thingie and no, actually it works for me.
Thanks for the feedback. Any favorite lines or un-favorite ones?
From the prologue: Hands that have touched every part of him wrap the heavy cotton (belt) around Sean's waist--front to back, crossing over his spine and then around to the front again. Dave tugs the ends; the fabric makes a soft snap.
The knot is strong, and it gives him a feeling of security.
Different, but foreshadowed at least?
Heh. I can't see Sean letting there be any chance he'd get stopped in the airport wearing something with /any/ embarrasment-potential.
I'm actually planning ahead a few chapters now. Scary, huh? :)
"He can feel it though. He knows it's there. It's enough." :) You are good, really, really good! I love that. The secrecy of it all. It is what we feel, not what we appear to be that makes up the reality of it all. *And that incoherent statement would be why I'm not a writer!*
This part of the story has so much potential to not "read" the way I want it to, but it seems like it clicked correctly with you, so I'm pleased. I didnt think your comment was incoherent at all.
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Glad you liked it though. I wrote it and then thought "this is too far out of 'character,'" but then I went and re-read the prologue/first chapter thingie and no, actually it works for me.
Thanks for the feedback. Any favorite lines or un-favorite ones?
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Different, for this series, I'm interested to see where it goes to next.
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Hands that have touched every part of him wrap the heavy cotton (belt) around Sean's waist--front to back, crossing over his spine and then around to the front again. Dave tugs the ends; the fabric makes a soft snap.
The knot is strong, and it gives him a feeling of security.
Different, but foreshadowed at least?
Heh. I can't see Sean letting there be any chance he'd get stopped in the airport wearing something with /any/ embarrasment-potential.
I'm actually planning ahead a few chapters now. Scary, huh? :)
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It's enough." :) You are good, really, really good! I love that. The secrecy of it all. It is what we feel, not what we appear to be that makes up the reality of it all. *And that incoherent statement would be why I'm not a writer!*
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This part of the story has so much potential to not "read" the way I want it to, but it seems like it clicked correctly with you, so I'm pleased. I didnt think your comment was incoherent at all.
Have a great day,
-J.
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Interesting bit of insight into him.
I find it fascinating that he feels more "himself" when he is putting on a "prop", getting ready to become someone else in an acting role.
That he was less focused and confident when he was away from all the pretending and just being Sean.
Hmm...
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