"Jujitsu" SPF RPS ch 9

[ladyjanelly]

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[ex_wegotta738]

Did I tell you how much I miss this?

[ladyjanelly]

Nope. :) Any feelings on this installment? Favorite lines, naughty thoughts?

[ex_wegotta738]

But you forgot to ask which sentence I thought was the most brilliant."The buzzing of a cel-phone set to "vibrate" fragments the remnants of the dream before Sean can figure out what part he was to play" Love that use of words. Or am I just putting it there, to represent his own feelings.

[ladyjanelly]

Heh. I couldnt get my Sean muse to tell me if his subconscious was going to give Dave a "reward," there on the steps, or take his heart on the altar.

Glad you liked that one. Tried for a contrast between the world and the dream. sounds like it worked for you. Thanks for the feedback. It helps me know what works and if I cross the line over into corny.

[ex_wegotta738]

Favorite Line? Easy! my fav line is definitely "If he sounds a little breathy and a little aroused, he's alright with it"
That is a damn sexy line! Says a whole lot and I adore it. It says "everything" actually. As I am sure you meant it to.

[ladyjanelly]

He respects Dave's limits, but he's not afraid of putting himself out there, making himself that little bit vulnerable.

Did the "smoke-scarred" description of Norman's voice work, or was it cheesy?

[ex_wegotta738]

"smoke-scarred" description" I did like it a lot and no sooner had I read "smoke-scarred" my brain went **ohhh Normy**. I did not mention it though because I wasn't sure if I thought it was brilliant and sexy because it "is" or just because it's "Norm" ;))) I love the way you describe so very much in so few vivid and well chosen words.

[ladyjanelly]

yah, Norm has the distinctive thing going for his voice, definitely. I think that was the line I was most worried about in this piece. Thanks again for the feedback.

-J.

[goodtwin]

~bites nails~

...and Sean has himself some really hot dreams there, doesn't he?

Mmmg.

[ladyjanelly]

I've always imagined Sean as someone who dreams in infra-red, ultra-violet and everything in-between. Saturated. Like the colors available aren't enough to encompass the richness of his sleeping mind.

So yeah. Phone call from Reedus...

[athousanderrors]

:O Ahaha I love. Guh. What a lovely mental image. And I have no doubt you already know what Normy does to my ovaries. :P

God, wish I had his voice in my ear waking me up in the mornings...*sigh*

Favourite line? '...a smoke-scarred laugh tickles at his ear.' Just....yeah. I can hear it.

Can't wait for the next chapter :)

[fscorsair_bane]

"come to receive his prize or offer himself up for sacrifice with equal dignity."

Very Very Very few things can describe the way someone carries themselves such as this. I like it :) and uh yah you win, so i do read your stories....deal with it ;)