Fic: Life Drawing 5/? PG-13 J2

[ladyjanelly]

Fictional
Warnings: "Oh, Jensen--" read at your own risk
So much thanks to Jellicle for the hand-holding and the con-critting and corrections and all her hard work

I'll probably make some changes to this fic before I pimp it out or make it overtly-public. All y'all friends list people, feel free to hit me with any and all concrit you've got.

Comments

[cal_j_fielding]

oh...lovely.

Oblivious!Jared strikes again...but he's not so oblivious anymore, bit still so endearingly confuzzeled.

And Jensen...him going to sleep fully dressed just about broke my heart...thats kind of telling about his general state of mind.

I love how you have him interact with Garrett, the little comments that point to so much possible trauma in the past...and now we know how long he's known Garrett for...and he's all worried about future roomamtes...and have I mentioned I love this yet.

LOve the Padalecki parents...they are awesome....

So yeah..Love this...it gets more interesting and intriguing as it goes on...so , lookng forward to seing where you take it.

[ladyjanelly]

Thank you thank you! :)

I don't think of Jared as less-than-bright, but he's emotionally inexperianced in this, and he tends to think in absolutes and then have a hard time accepting sudden changes to his world view.

I'm glad the fully-dressed thing works for you. Jellicle convinced me it wasn't over-the-top, so I kept it. It may not be something he does all the time, but this new situation is making him feel kinda vulnerable.

I'm pleased that Garrett's still an acceptable OC. So tricky to write. Probably harder than writing a best-friend character for an original fiction piece.

Heh. The PadaParents are funny to write. So cluelessly wise. They try so hard.

Thank you, as always, for you bit ol' detailed feedback. It is very helpful at this stage of the game.

[embroiderama]

I adore Jared's ups and downs here--the whole shock of his parents pretty much knowing he's gay before he does, thinking Jensen's in a relationship, realizing he's single. It's really sweet and feels right for Jared. And Jensen--oh, he's so fucked up, but I see some glimmers of hope for him.

[ladyjanelly]

Sorry it took so long to get back to you.

Heh. Jared's just a little out of his comfort zone right now. But then again, so's Jensen, so it's all fair.

Glad you enjoyed it. I'm like 500 words into the next chapter. Took me a little while to figure where the heck it was going next.

[ymmy12]

i so love this series
there is something about a shy jensen that just make me want to sigh real loud!

[ladyjanelly]

Everytime I read an interview or something that talks about how shy he is, i just wanna snuggle him.

[sea_yeah]

Love the parent talk - hee! poor Jared. Love how Mama Pad' folded Jensen's clothes. Love the little reveals about Jensen. And I absolutely love the picture of Jensen pulling his hood down to sleep. That image is just insanely heartwarming and heartwrenching at the same time. So much love for this!!!

[ladyjanelly]

Heh. Jared's so screwed. In a good way.

I couldn't see Sherri just taking Jensen's clothes out and dumping them in a bag to get all wrinkled and stuff. But how embarrasing to know some guy's mom touched your underwear.

Glad the hood thing worked. I was a little worried it was too much, but everybody seemed to love it.

[jellicle]

Jerry comes over and picks Jared’s chair off the floor. Jared sits down again. He feels numb, stupid. He’s gay. He likes Jensen. He likes Jensen a lot, and it’s this glaring disparity, this point where he realizes he doesn’t know himself at all.

You nailed it!
You know this is my favorite chapter so far. Garrett waiting for Jensen, worried for him and at the same time I just know he's happy that Jensen is making a new friend.
It's just... I love this. Period.

[ladyjanelly]

It's better...not quite right, but I dunno what else to do with it. It's hard to show it as this blank spot that Jared's not really ready to look at yet.

Thanks for the support.

I think Garrett's worried about when he graduates and leaves as much as Jensen is.

Thank you, so much.

[jellicle]

I think you nailed and it is right exactly for that reason. This is not Jared being "wow, I'm gay, why didn't I notice before, and yeah from now one I'll be out and proud" but being "okay, I like him, how didn't I notice I like him... that much? And how much exactly I like him? And what does this really mean?". Taht's why for me, this works.

But if you feel this needs work, you can count on me to help you find a way to what you're looking for. Always.