Breakfast with Tiffany; Part 1.

[laestrygonians]

Title: Breakfast with Tiffany; Part 1.
Genre: Fluff, Angst.
Pairing: Jessica & Tiffany
Summary: Jessica dreams. Is it just a dream?
A/N: So... okay asdjkasdjkasdjk here is some angsty Jeti. Pardon me, my grammer is horrible. Please comment! :) Thank you.

The fluorescent light strikes her.

She walks.

Everything was white.

Clean.

Bright.

She walks, the sound

Comments

[ext_557465]

I cried so hard while reading... How can it only be the first part ? This one's so angsty, how will the second part then ? *sigh*
I like your fic and I'll read the sequel even if it's gonna make me cry lol

[laestrygonians]

I'm sorry :( /pass you some tissues
I'll... get the second part up soon orhz. anyway, thansk for reading!

[foolsxluxury]

ME NEEDS PART 2 NAO!RIGHT NAO!

That being said,I love this.A lot.I personally think you portrayed the emotions very well.And because I've always been a sucker for angst fics,especially JeTi ones so.Thank you for writing this<3

[laestrygonians]

Thank you for reading this :') i'll try to get part two up soon but my lazy butt refuse to move :(

this fic is darker than usual.. o:

[ext_733389]

you improved! grammar and length wise.

Just some mistakes:
"red-headed buried her head" -> red-head
"She breathed, her vision blurry and her head thumping wildly." her vision blurred and her head thumped wildly
"The usual lively girl was to quiet." too quiet

(at this part I got a little teary) I liked how you added the part about the movie Tiffany watched with Leo, it helped readers visualize the characters better.

it was sad when everyone cried I could visualize that especially with what we've all been through with the SooYoung incident lately ))':

I liked how you described the part when Jessica admired Tiffany's features : "the forehead..cheeks" - that was good

Did you get the inspiration from Inception? :P
It seems like it was a dream in a dream and so on and so forth yadda yadda
It's cute how the girl keeps sleeping, time for her to wake up!
maybe a hot girl with crescent eye-smiles tryna help her get out of bed? *hinthint* part 2 sequel (no i don't mean rated stuff, lol!)

Re: this fic is darker than usual.. o:

[laestrygonians]

Unnieeeee~ Thank you omg you commented :') your exams are over? yeah i know i cry when writing this fic LOLLOL. not really because i haven't watched Inception :( Part 2 is ready, i'm just a lazy butt who is lazy to type heehee. but THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU <3

[derpytaeng]

OH MY GOD JENNICA UNNIR I HATE YOU OMG THIS FIC IS BEAUTIFUL. Oh my god you know I'm not a Jeti shipper but this is really... beautiful. It reminds me of Inception, so many layers of dreams haha. But it's so omg, I almost cried. It's beautifully sad, and that's a compliment keke. Keep up the good work and update me when Part 2 is out, and uhm, GET ME A BOX OF KLEENEX TOO I NEED TO WIPE MY TEARS :c

[laestrygonians]

NAWWWWW BARNEY DON'T HATE ME :( /pass you a box of tissues. i'll try to get part 2 up soon & i'll definitely update you~! thanks for reading heehee

[byunmickey]

nice nice!! but i'm confused!!
watt happened at the end? and is tht nightmare gunna happen?

[laestrygonians]

Part 2 will... relief the confusion i hope LOL. anyway thanks for reading!