It's like a dizzy cat, only operating on military time...
What do you think about the new look? Should I stick with it or go back to Elazul?
By the way, here's
Long ago in a time dust covers, lived Lady Dawn and her two lovers,
They were all friends but one of them fell,
Their gripping story I will tell.
So listen well fair dames and gents,
To this story of impure intents.
“Hearken, miss,” said Dawn’s Lady-in Waiting,
“John is here and the doorbell is ringing
Ready thyself, miss, for this young suitor
Hurry thyself, miss, to the second floor”
Bard: Enter John, son of a local blacksmith
Dawn rushes upstairs to prepare forthwith.
“Where are you, fair Dawn,” calls John from below
“Your bright face eludes me; let it now show!”
Dawn appears on second floor
“Why John, how you flatter me. What brings you here?”
“We can’t talk long. The day grows late, I fear.”
John: “why does it matter? For you are the dawn!”
“Let’s take a walk. We shall not be long gone.”
Enter Leo
Leo: “John, my friend, how nice it is to see you.”
John: “Hello, my good Leo, how do you do?”
Leo: “I am quite well, I am here for a date.” Gesture at Dawn
John: “Oh really? Me too, I hope I’m not late.”
Dawn: “A date? Oh no, I’d forgotten! Dear me!”
Leo: “It will be alright. Don’t worry, you’ll see!”
Dawn: “But I made a promise. What shall I do?
Oh, how shall I ever choose between you?”
John: “ Do not fear for I know what shall be done, and by one of us your heart will be won.”
Leo: “ So what is it that you propose to do?”
John: “ Simple my friend we will just have a duel.”
Dawn: “Oh no, I do not want you to be hurt! This is a mistake that I must avert.”
John: “Do not worry we will not fight with swords, but our duel will be fought only with words. I will let you start so say what you feel, and what you truly are shall be revealed.” awkward
Leo: “Her eyes, her eyes! They make me feel weak! And nobody has a better physique.”
John: “So you want her body to be your own, and from her money she shall be thrown?” awkward
Leo: “You have me wrong, my intentions are pure! Oh why are you misleading her monsieur?”
John: “I know your past and you have once been poor, you don’t wish to live as you did before.”
Leo: “I shall defend my honor against you! With my words, before the Lady I pursue”
Leo: “My words are sharper than any drawn sword, so now let the blood of your heart be poured”
John: You played by the rules, and you won the duel, and now I die here, and perish a fool!
(Pardon the various grammatical errors. Also, this is a work in progress, so hopefully we will improve the areas that say *awkward*)
I must say it's the best piece of group writing I've been a part of. And it's poetry, no less! I always thought writing as a group was a hopeless endeavor, but life amazes me every day.
By the way, here's
Long ago in a time dust covers, lived Lady Dawn and her two lovers,
They were all friends but one of them fell,
Their gripping story I will tell.
So listen well fair dames and gents,
To this story of impure intents.
“Hearken, miss,” said Dawn’s Lady-in Waiting,
“John is here and the doorbell is ringing
Ready thyself, miss, for this young suitor
Hurry thyself, miss, to the second floor”
Bard: Enter John, son of a local blacksmith
Dawn rushes upstairs to prepare forthwith.
“Where are you, fair Dawn,” calls John from below
“Your bright face eludes me; let it now show!”
Dawn appears on second floor
“Why John, how you flatter me. What brings you here?”
“We can’t talk long. The day grows late, I fear.”
John: “why does it matter? For you are the dawn!”
“Let’s take a walk. We shall not be long gone.”
Enter Leo
Leo: “John, my friend, how nice it is to see you.”
John: “Hello, my good Leo, how do you do?”
Leo: “I am quite well, I am here for a date.” Gesture at Dawn
John: “Oh really? Me too, I hope I’m not late.”
Dawn: “A date? Oh no, I’d forgotten! Dear me!”
Leo: “It will be alright. Don’t worry, you’ll see!”
Dawn: “But I made a promise. What shall I do?
Oh, how shall I ever choose between you?”
John: “ Do not fear for I know what shall be done, and by one of us your heart will be won.”
Leo: “ So what is it that you propose to do?”
John: “ Simple my friend we will just have a duel.”
Dawn: “Oh no, I do not want you to be hurt! This is a mistake that I must avert.”
John: “Do not worry we will not fight with swords, but our duel will be fought only with words. I will let you start so say what you feel, and what you truly are shall be revealed.” awkward
Leo: “Her eyes, her eyes! They make me feel weak! And nobody has a better physique.”
John: “So you want her body to be your own, and from her money she shall be thrown?” awkward
Leo: “You have me wrong, my intentions are pure! Oh why are you misleading her monsieur?”
John: “I know your past and you have once been poor, you don’t wish to live as you did before.”
Leo: “I shall defend my honor against you! With my words, before the Lady I pursue”
Leo: “My words are sharper than any drawn sword, so now let the blood of your heart be poured”
John: You played by the rules, and you won the duel, and now I die here, and perish a fool!
(Pardon the various grammatical errors. Also, this is a work in progress, so hopefully we will improve the areas that say *awkward*)
I must say it's the best piece of group writing I've been a part of. And it's poetry, no less! I always thought writing as a group was a hopeless endeavor, but life amazes me every day.