LJ Idol, Season 10, Week 3 - Brushback Pitch

[lapis_lazuli615]

“Now’s the perfect time. We’ve figured out the other clues, we just have to follow through on them. But they don’t have the first clue where the third clue leads, and we do. So we do the hard part first and then wipe the table with them while they’re still trying to work their way through the first two

Comments

[penpusher]

I got the feeling this was a scavenger hunt and they were trying to complete their tasks first!

I'm probably the only one who thinks so, but shouldn't upstage really refer to being up close to the audience and downstage be about being down and away? Of course that would ruin the metaphor "upstaging someone."

[lapis_lazuli615]

Definitely a scavenger hunt.

Actually, no. One would think upstage would be closer to the audience but it's not, for two reasons, I think.
1) there usually is a slight tilt to a stage, so that the bit further away from the audience is higher.
2) if you "upstage" someone, you pull the audience's attention away from that person and onto yourself. How better to do that, than to get them to turn to look at you, and make them turn their back to the audience? :)

[adoptedwriter]

A fun read. Great dialogue which moves the story!

[lapis_lazuli615]

Thank you. :)

[sinnamongirl]

Thank you for your entry!

[lapis_lazuli615]

Thank you for reading! :)

[magazhchi]

I was engaged by the dialogues. Wonderful work. Curious to know more.

[lapis_lazuli615]

Thank you, I like engaging people with my writing.
I don't know if we'll see more of this story, time (and Gary's choice of topic) will tell, I suppose.

[beeker121]

Heh - stage directions as a plot point, fabulous. Even when I used them all the time it was still possible to get it wrong.
"go left."
"no, stage left."
"your other left."

[lapis_lazuli615]

I swear by all that I hold holy that if my left hand did not form an L when I held it out, I might forget which is which myself! :)

Didn't think of it as a plot point, but yeah, it kinda is, huh? :)