DW fic, Occam's Razor- Part 1

[laughingduchess]

Comments

[a_proclivity]

This fic is awesome. Please keep working on it!

[laughingduchess]

Thank you! It's just about done at the moment, just needs a little tweaking.

I'm glad you're enjoying it and thank you for commenting.

[white_taz]

Fantastic beginning! Looking forward to the next part!

[laughingduchess]

I'm so glad you like it and just so you know, the next part will be up soon. Thank you for commenting!

[jayaydee]

After reading literally dozens of reunion(ish) fics in the past couple of weeks, I thought I was all reunioned-out - until I found this.
Have to agree with everyone above, the format flows beautifully and you definitely grabbed my attention from the simplicity of the very first chapter. Really looking forward to reading more of this.

[laughingduchess]

I have to say I was really nervous about posting a reunion fic. There have been so many that I myself am a bit over the genre. Sadly I had a scene that I couldn't get out of my brain and so I had no choice but to put it down and then the rest of this came tumbling out around it.

I hope that it continues to keep you interested and thank you very much for taking a chance and reading it. Hopefully other people will give it a whirl too!

[honorh]

I like this--the whole style of it and your Rose characterization--but I can't get past the stupidity Torchwood is displaying here. Why would they disregard the warnings of the only person who actually has experience with time travel? Don't they have temporal physicists who'd at least have some clue about the problems of paradoxes? And I really can't picture Mickey acting like that toward Rose. He of all people would know that she knows what she's talking about. I'm sorry, but that doesn't work for me. Telling her she's off the project because she stopped Mickey from doing something even the dullest temporal scientist would know is a no-no just feels *off*. Like they're treating her as a hysterical female instead of, well, the only person with practical experience in time travel

[laughingduchess]

Oh, don't ever worry about critiquing me. I appreciate it and am grateful that you took the time to tell me

[honorh]

Thanks for replying! Yeah, that bit wasn't clear--it looks like they pulled her from the project because she wanted to prevent a paradox, and my brain just wasn't wrapping around that. Though I still don't think Mickey would question her knowledge about these things; after all, he traveled with the Doctor as well. If she completely lost her temper with him or something, or really started acting weird, I think I'd buy that.

You really do have a lovely style, and I like that you have Rose falling hard for someone, even if it didn't work out. She's such an emotional, passionate person, and I hate the idea that she can't love again, even if she never completely gets over the Doctor.

One final tip, and this is something a beta had to break me of back in The Day: You have Rose saying "Pete" in every line during the last conversation. Might look okay on paper, but it would sound awfully strange out loud. I *still* have to keep myself from doing that when writing phone conversations.

[laughingduchess]

I'll pull out the earlier drafts and work on it and when I've polished it up I'll let you know (if you want to know).

You have Rose saying "Pete" in every line during the last conversation

Omg. I do. I haaaaate that, I can't believe I did it.

*hangs head in shame*

Thank you again, I'm not a writer so I need all the help I can get.

[laughingduchess]

I'm glad you're enjoying it so far. I have a few things to fix here and then I'll be putting up the next bit. Thank you so much for taking the time to comment.