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laurelsblue

[Fic] A Study of Flowers

Feb 22, 2011 21:00

Title: A Study of Flowers
Characters: Touka, Hashirama, Tobirama and Mito
Pairings: one-sided Touka/Hashirama and Hashirama/Mito
Genre: Humour
Rating: K+
Notes: Gift for nthcoincident 's birthday. It's not the Izuna/Touka I keep promising you but hopefully it's okay.
Summary: What Touka's childhood might have been like.

( she has known them forever )

uzumaki mito, senju hashirama, senju tobirama, naruto, !complete, senju touka

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OMG nthcoincident February 22 2011, 22:54:02 UTC

AOFJAOIFJ I saw this on my f-list and was like FOUNDING OF KONOHA FIC? IS IT REAL? W-WAIT, IT--IT'S FOR ME! and then I clicked on it so fast my finger still hurts. You are amazing and also possibly psychic; this is exactly the kind of thing I would have wanted to read today &hearts I have literally nothing to give you about this that's not squee but that's...expected, right? I mean it's not like I would have read this and reacted normally and sedately or anything.

I have very little headcanon about Ms. Senju Touka except that she eventually hooks up with Izuna, but it makes SO much more sense for her to be infatuated with the clan heartthrob, because honestly, if Hashirama were real, who on earth wouldn't be infatuated with him? Especially as he is here, so considerate and thoughtful even towards a very peripheral person.

And your Touka, oh, your Touka--so observant and fierce and passionate without coming off as grating or abrasive, which is something 99% of writers including myself aren't able to pull off when doing this kind of ( ... )

Re: OMG laurelsblue February 22 2011, 23:37:51 UTC

Hah, so kind! Ever since I got the notification that your birthday was coming up, I tried to bash that Izuna/Touka arranged marriage fic I've been working on into shape but Touka refused to cooperate, mainly because I didn't have a clue who she was and she knew it.

You were incredibly right about the role/personality thing. As she doesn't have either, I decided to give her a role (Senju bros' kid sister) and hope the personality would follow.

The Touka/Hashirama thing wrote itself practically although it makes a lot of sense. I think probably the only one who wasn't in love with him was Tobirama. If I hadn't been running out of time and fed up due to having to retype the last two paragraphs, I would have done a bit where she realises she still loves him but she's not in love with him any more ( ... )

Re: OMG nthcoincident February 23 2011, 00:10:43 UTC

:D That was possibly the most useful piece of writing advice I ever got out of my writing seminar! Looking back on my favorite pieces of minor-character fic I see that they did the same thing, starting with either a role or a personality and extrapolating. It worked so well here! She's not some kind of aggressively focused equal or neglected waif; she's just a typical kid sister, and given the hyper-masculine ethos of the Super Senju Bros. that seems just right.

*glibly taking character notes* I'd just kind of shoehorned her in as someone who literally exists only for the purpose of snarking at Tobirama about his creepy unrequited obsession with Mito, but that scene where Hashirama is teaching her to write exploding tags is just adorable. So much love for that. Also not on topic at all but later tonight look out for your Yamato + Kushina fic; it was among the first batch of fic-snippets I tackled and I'll post them tonight after going to dinner &hearts ( ... )

Re: OMG laurelsblue February 23 2011, 15:24:36 UTC

It's pretty easy to make her either of those and I nearly fell into that trap. I think giving her a relatively normal, good childhood (for someone who grew up when and where she did) is important. It allows her to serve as a counterpoint to the founding five who almost certainly had very atypical and difficult childhoods ( ... )

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