Cutting through the BS

[lawliet_kun]

People say that when they read my college application essays, they don't get a real sense of emotion, that it reads like BS. I decided, even though I didn't even intend it as a potential essay to use, I would write something fully from the heart. Now I'm thinking it has potential. Thoughts?

Comments

[pspgm]

Dude.

That is fucking cool.

If you want srs crit for the purposes of making that your college essay - even though I can't see more than a few tiny details I'd change to make it so - I am so here for you. Because that is terrific. And so totally you!

[lawliet_kun]

OH MY GOD CRIT PLX.

[reinadecopas]

I love essays about not knowing what to write an essay about.

also this is awesome.