Comments | lckngrwv_writes: Under the Rain, Chapter 1

lckngrwv_writes

Under the Rain, Chapter 1

Dec 02, 2005 11:51

(Fanfic. Severus Snape belongs to JKR, not me.)
( Chapter One - Living Death )

Comments 2

karelia January 22 2006, 08:56:18 UTC

"He was pathetic looking[,] and aware of that fact." I believe there's no comma in that sentence. Aside from that, I cannot find anything. Intriguing story so far, am looking forward to reading more! :-)

lckngrwv_writes January 22 2006, 19:03:35 UTC

Thanks! I'm glad you like the chapter.