Running With Scissors [Chapter One]

[dohremi]

Title: Running With Scissors | Chapter One
Author: dohremi
Rating: PG-15
Pairing/Focus: Ontae
Summary: A/U | "The hottest love has the coldest end." Socrates
Author's Note: Okay I lied. I wrote an even longer one this time. Damn. I'm sorry. -.-

Prologue | Chapter One

Comments

[ajin]

I wasn't really persuaded by the prologue but I have to say that now I think the story has potential. Although I can't imagine Jinki being good at soccer...The Onew Condition is rooted too deeply in my mind XD I may change my mind though. Who knows...
I like your writing style. Some people have the tendency to focus on dialogue too much (or too little) but in this story I think it's about right. At least that's how it feels for me^^
It's been a while since I've read a fic I didn't want to complain about too much. You should definitely take this as a compliment Ü

I really don't think anyone minds the length of the chapters tbh XD

[dohremi]

Thank you. Wah. I FEEL VERY SPECIAL! lolol xD
I understood what you meant about Onew condition though. I really don't want to sacrifice that. It makes him who he is. Hopefully, as the story develops I'll find a way to compromise both reality and fiction together. ^^ Thanks for that little critic/compliment. I'll work harder next time. =]

[doongie]

SPOT.

[doongie]

"Yah. Taemin-ah. I told you to stop pulling it. You have to cut it. Cut it!" Kibum pointed at the rosy red spot that began to look very angry and painful.
Umma!Key is omnipresent OTL

"Kibum resorted to sharpening his tongue, spitting out venomous list of vocabularies"
Ofc diva key would choose to do that ;)

"Shouldn't you already know Jaebeom? It takes one to know one."
HAHAHAHAHA TEAM KIBUM FTW! /fistpumps/
Somehow this reminds me of the quote "It takes a bitch to know a bitch, bitch."

"Kibum insisted that he becomes a lacto-vegetarian, someone who would eat dairy products but not eggs, to cleanse himself and to spare himself from the thought of killing innocent animals."
Why am I not surprised?

"Eating meat increases your chance of getting heart attacks or developing cancer." A glare was sent toward Taemin's plate before it evolved into adoring affection for the slices of whole-wheat bread in his own hands.
ROFL WAYLT KEY! You shouldn't be preventing Taemin from eating nutritiously; he's a growing kid! And fat!tae is a

[dohremi]

0____0 I don't know where to start.
I love long comments! \^0^/
I wish I have a friend like Key so sarcastic~ I'm sarcastic. Maybe if I meet him we might repel instead of attract ;~;
I'm so glad someone got my sense of humor. In real life, I'm funny. (I think I am.) But in writing, I have none. -.- so I'm happy you enjoyed that ^^ I'll explain the coral reefs part later. It's something that still a mystery kekeke that and also Shin Sekyung -winks- hehehe.
I realize that this is AU high school plot, and realistically, we do know the people that are around us even though they aren't so important, which is why I added lots of characters (Jay, Seungri). I want them to be cameos heheh. Thanks for being so enthusiastic. It motivates me a lot.

[doongie]

Don't mention it~
I can't wait for the next few chapters! 8D

[ichigochancake]

really interesting! i usually don't read highschool au's too much, because not a lot of people write them well, heck i'm not sure i can myself, but this is really good. i can't wait for the next chapter! i'm surprised about how you chose to portray jinki's character, since most people stick to the dorky smart clumsy kid. i'm excited to see how his and taemin's relationship progresses.

[dohremi]

Thanks for the lovely comment. It's hard to write about highschool stuff without getting annoy because not a lot of us have good memory of our highschool years. xD I'm glad you enjoyed it. I'll work hard and hopefully update soon enough.

[anapp]

ohoho, now we've met our main characters... I have to say, I'm surprised (like the comment above mine lol) that you decided to portray Jinki this way. It's intriguing, and it has potential as long as he doesn't go out of character. I can't really see Jinki being mean to anyone, maybe that's the problem OTL
Poor Taem :( LOL Umma!Key/Taemin interaction was very funny!
Ohohoho, it's revenge time for Taemin >:D I wonder what he plans to do!

oh, and Merry Christmas :)

[dohremi]

Ahahah =] hopefully I wont disappoint everyone. You'll see that Jinki isn't mean. His friends may be bad people but he probably isn't like them. ^^
Thanks for reading and commenting <3 Merry Christmas to you too even though i'm late, Happy New Year

[rockthesocks14]

this is a really interesting. i wonder what your gonna do with this. i cant really explain myself, (reason for my short/failed comments) but im enjoying this.

[dohremi]

ahah thanks for the lovely comment =] It's still a good one.