well thank you very much Sir Landeros. it's funny, you like the stanza the best that i dislike the most. my favorite stanzas are 3 and 4, though i like number 2 also. number one is alright but i dont really like the last one. thanks for commenting though, we dont criticize each others work enough anymore... i will try to comment on your writing too. have a good time in LA and i'll see you back for recording the rock and fucking roll.
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Favorite stanza: the last
Least favorite: the first, too clunky I think. I like to be reeled in with melody.
The second stanza is the hook in my opinion. Way to lay it down man.
The last really brings it home though, very nonchalant.
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have a good time in LA and i'll see you back for recording the rock and fucking roll.
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-Muffin
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