I finally get to read and review this story. *claps* I love what you've done with the prompt, I love your quiet, pensive, intelligent John, the way you build up emotions and tension and bring him to realisation.
And "Atlantis documentaries" - I enjoyed the descriptions of various recordings - I wish we saw something like that on the show, and other small, human, personal touches like gatherings after a near disaster, mutual comfort and reasuring. And because all of that is missing from the show, fanfiction can be so vivid and realistic. This is one of those stories, where those small, everyday human touches are present.
This is one of my favorite sections (it's really difficult picking out a single line to quote in a comment, because the whole text is gorgeous):
The things that you never want to leave are the things worth fighting for, and it’s better to be doing that fighting as far away as possible from what you want to protect. Of course, that is the logic that will end up stranding you on Godforsaken backwater planets,
( ... )
One of these days I am going to get to yours as well. I actually started, but then realised pretty quickly that that wasn't a fic to be read in a rush, so I laid it aside for a quieter moment.
I also think that I need to write a meta for this fic at one point soon. It's not the best thing I've ever written, but I haven't written anything for a while so this was like easing my way into things again. It's entirely possible that I have crammed too much into it, but I needed to write some things out.
I was very afraid that the Elizabeth in this fic would be considered OOC (there seems to be this aura of eternal strength and wisdom around her generally), but I know in my heart of hearts that she isn't. That's also something that I wanted to write about in that meta.
But thank you so much for the lovely long comment.
“Well,” she gives a small self-deprecating huff, “okay, maybe it is."
“I’m not so sure about that,” she says, and he’s not quite sure whether she’s being self-deprecating or genuinely resigned.
good. that's Elizabeth :D
John manages to ruminate on the irony of him knowing Elizabeth so well that he can tell all that from the way she stands, but still not having had any idea that she was in love with him. Or that he was in love with her. lol!
“This is going to be interesting oh.. I like that....
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And "Atlantis documentaries" - I enjoyed the descriptions of various recordings - I wish we saw something like that on the show, and other small, human, personal touches like gatherings after a near disaster, mutual comfort and reasuring. And because all of that is missing from the show, fanfiction can be so vivid and realistic. This is one of those stories, where those small, everyday human touches are present.
This is one of my favorite sections (it's really difficult picking out a single line to quote in a comment, because the whole text is gorgeous):
The things that you never want to leave are the things worth fighting for, and it’s better to be doing that fighting as far away as possible from what you want to protect. Of course, that is the logic that will end up stranding you on Godforsaken backwater planets, ( ... )
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One of these days I am going to get to yours as well. I actually started, but then realised pretty quickly that that wasn't a fic to be read in a rush, so I laid it aside for a quieter moment.
I also think that I need to write a meta for this fic at one point soon. It's not the best thing I've ever written, but I haven't written anything for a while so this was like easing my way into things again. It's entirely possible that I have crammed too much into it, but I needed to write some things out.
I was very afraid that the Elizabeth in this fic would be considered OOC (there seems to be this aura of eternal strength and wisdom around her generally), but I know in my heart of hearts that she isn't. That's also something that I wanted to write about in that meta.
But thank you so much for the lovely long comment.
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“I’m not so sure about that,” she says, and he’s not quite sure whether she’s being self-deprecating or genuinely resigned.
good. that's Elizabeth :D
John manages to ruminate on the irony of him knowing Elizabeth so well that he can tell all that from the way she stands, but still not having had any idea that she was in love with him. Or that he was in love with her.
lol!
“This is going to be interesting
oh.. I like that....
sigh, very nice luv. heartwarming. real.
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