Callin all peeps!

Jan 28, 2004 21:08

Hey all, I just need some advice, could u do me a favor and post in my comments which one of these poems you like the best. 1, 2 or 3. If you could do that I would appreciate it soooo much! Thanx a billion ( Read more... )

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anonymous January 29 2004, 01:19:50 UTC
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joann5483 January 29 2004, 07:25:10 UTC
wow jame they are all really really good but i like 1 better...not by much...but if i had to choose id choose 1

awwww ur my talented cuddle buddy!!! love you and miss you more then life itself...come play soon im going thru jamie withdrawl!!!

the joge

haha that sounds like the cheat but not

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Re: joann5483 January 29 2004, 11:26:55 UTC
actually maybe i like the second one best...ahhhhhh i dunno i cant deside...they are all excellent

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Poetic justice onehandoneheart January 29 2004, 07:42:56 UTC
Jamie,
I like the first one best,and these lines
from the third one:
"Escape is not for you,
Peace will not come for those
Who are attacked from within"
are both vividly chilling and haunting.Your
talent is evident.Excellent.Simply excellent
hon.Much love,Michel ~~~~~~/>~~~~/>~~~~~~~~~~~~

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sxphnplyr January 29 2004, 10:59:15 UTC
Of the three, I was stirred most by the second. Its very descriptive, and I like the way you keep bringing different aspects of the rain/storm into it throughout, with different comparisons. A few wording tweaks, to make your ideas more clear and concise could make it even more powerful. I look forward to reading more of your work. :-)

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chrisanne January 29 2004, 12:31:45 UTC
both 1 and 2 are very good.
but seeing as how you said choose 1 I'd go with 1.
I miss you!
I hope Chesta is behaving!
We need to go for another drive and see how many truckers we can get to honk!!

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