Comments | lespaul6: Three Dates: (Duff's Date)

lespaul6

Three Dates: (Duff's Date)

Jan 29, 2011 03:39

Title: Three Date's (Duff‘s Date)
Rating: PG-13/ R for language among other things
Pairing: Slash/Izzy Slash/Duff Slash/Axl
Completed or WIP:WIP

( REad please if youve read the first )

slash, steven, duff, long

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liz_hg2969 February 17 2011, 03:30:17 UTC

As always, there are some technical errors here and there and there are things that can be expanded or phrased differently but I'm not going to type it all out in a comment. If you want, I'll copy and paste some corrections into an email.

Other than that, it keeps my focus and I'm glad to see you writing and enjoying writing and I can see compared to your old stuff, you're writing more now and it's stronger.

lespaul6 February 17 2011, 11:39:04 UTC

Sure if you don't mind doing it. I want to see where I can continue improving besides going to english class

anonymous April 1 2011, 16:56:14 UTC

More?
I'm so curious to see what happens. I've been checking your journal religiously just to see when the next part comes.

lespaul6 April 2 2011, 05:34:32 UTC

I have the next one up but, it's a bit more graphic so I put a friends only lock on it

anonymous April 2 2011, 21:36:59 UTC

aw that's too bad :(

lespaul6 April 3 2011, 12:22:00 UTC

Sorry, it's the only way to make sure kids don't read it. If i had you added as a friend you could read it but i guess ananimity is a good thing?

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