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FIC for orpheus_samhain: "Call of the Dark"

Jun 23, 2008 13:09

Title: Call of the Dark
Author: esmestrella
Recipient: orpheus_samhain
Rating: R
Words: ~3,800
Warnings: Some purple prose, brief drug use, slight dub-con (but see rating; no sex).
Summary: Severus has learned that Dark magic can burn away his imperfections, but can he convince Lily to see it his way?
Author's Notes: For orpheus_samhain, who at the eleventh hour was bereft of a gift. This ( Read more... )

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Comments 11

hobgoblinn June 24 2008, 01:50:19 UTC

Oh yeah. Perfect ending. Well done indeed.

Beautiful writing throughout, quiet and powerful. The recipient is a lucky person indeed, as are we all. Thanks for writing, and sharing this.

shyfoxling June 25 2008, 21:26:55 UTC

Oh yeah. Perfect ending.

I improved it then? Yay!

Beautiful writing throughout, quiet and powerful.

Thanks so much!

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shyfoxling June 25 2008, 21:27:02 UTC

Thank you!

torino10154 June 24 2008, 14:28:24 UTC

Wow, that was really powerful. Well done.

shyfoxling June 25 2008, 21:27:33 UTC

Thanks for reading, I'm glad it did that for you.

venturous1 June 25 2008, 13:31:53 UTC

a beautiful piece, haunting and perfect. It's chilling, what lies ahead.

shyfoxling June 25 2008, 21:27:45 UTC

a beautiful piece, haunting and perfect.

Thank you!

orpheus_samhain June 25 2008, 19:22:32 UTC

When you told me about your surprise fic I was so touched, because we know why I was bereft of the gift :) It was my own fault. Thank you very much!

This fic is just beautiful, you know? :) Sad, bitter, poetic and beautiful. It has a dreamlike quality to it. Or maybe it's reminiscing. The words flow so smoothly that they carry you through the whole story without any effort.

I love how you chose the potion's ingredients :) very telling.

Severus was so engrossed in his goal of equalling himself to Purebloods through the Dark magic that he was completely blind to what she wanted, needed and, well, was. The rituals, the purging is chilling. Alchemy, that's what comes to my mind when I read this. Gold out of lead.

As he came into his palm with her name on his lips, he realized that without even setting out to, he'd obtained tears as well.That line made me go "Guh!" Forget her - easily told ( ... )

shyfoxling June 25 2008, 21:29:45 UTC

It has a dreamlike quality to it. Or maybe it's reminiscing. The words flow so smoothly that they carry you through the whole story without any effort.

I wanted it to have a dreamy quality to it, so it's great to hear I succeeded. It was supposed to be thematically linked to the laudanum, the idea of "opium dreams".

The rituals, the purging is chilling. Alchemy, that's what comes to my mind when I read this. Gold out of lead.

Absolutely. Yay, I did that right too. :)

And that fin-de-siecle touch at the end *_*

I have a bit of a kink for use of certain drugs in fic, and opium is one of them... it seemed to have the right "dark" feel to it.

So in summary, SQUEE!