I just finished the rough draft of my Loyola essay, so if anyone wants to read it and give me some comments, please do! I will shove it behind a cut to save( your friends pages )
The only suggestion I make is that the first paragraph seems to not tie in with the rest of the essay. So perhaps at the end you could write something about the "clay" to tie it in. Maybe a good quote from a famous speech pathologist, or mention that with your degree, your community becomes the clay.. not sure how you would word it.
If you didn't make any changes though, it's still a great essay! What schools have you heard back from so far?
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The only suggestion I make is that the first paragraph seems to not tie in with the rest of the essay. So perhaps at the end you could write something about the "clay" to tie it in. Maybe a good quote from a famous speech pathologist, or mention that with your degree, your community becomes the clay.. not sure how you would word it.
If you didn't make any changes though, it's still a great essay! What schools have you heard back from so far?
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I was accepted to University of Pittsburgh, as well as into their honors college, and into Towson :)
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you blow me away.
i love you.
you are so going places in life.
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