Jon Jon's first stinky poem since August

[lestreetspirit]

Not that I've written anything unstinky since then either but whatever. Here it is in semi - rough draft form

Comments

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[feynmanlovesred]

Jonathan-
I really enjoyed reading your latest poem. I especially liked the last four lines--they are so simple, yet say so much. And while I see how it might be a semi-rough draft (some of the lines or words seem kinda forced), I think you have a great start here with beautiful imagery and thoughts. (And as a side note, the two lines about older and younger men and women reminded me of a certain Walt Whitman poem. Except your lines are better.)
-Jennifer