Comments | letmeelaborate7: Cutting Hair

letmeelaborate7

Cutting Hair

Aug 30, 2006 18:46

This is my english essay. It was supposed to be factual, but I adapted it from a poem I wrote. Bite me ( Read more... )

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comeonandvogue7 August 30 2006, 23:52:37 UTC

Take out the last sentence. It's a little off.

But I really, really, really like it.

It's not factual, right?

letmeelaborate7 August 31 2006, 00:13:36 UTC

The last sentence is the only thing that gives it even a semblance of a moral. Neccessary tot he assignment i'm afraid.

comeonandvogue7 August 31 2006, 00:14:54 UTC

Well, that's lame. For the assignment, keep it in. Otherwise, take it out!

je_veux_ta_bite August 31 2006, 20:53:40 UTC

ooh, how overwhelmed is your english teacher going to be? i mean, this is super well-written and really creative... but it just strikes me as an odd writing style for an essay. howeverrrr - i like it, snugglepup, and i hope this is what your english teacher was looking for. get lots of 100s in english for me! plus maybe also share it in CW bc i bet schaack would get a kick out of you adapting that haircut poem.