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[libralexi89]

Bitter day finally fades

into such an anticipated night

Traces of the sun’s colorful lip-

stick remain on the sky

as she lays down for her rest

The sugary joys of twilight’s intoxication

wishfully enclose on us

while lonely clocks strike early hours

missing their children

to wake from supposed needed slumber

Grinning, playful stars intrigue the night

Comments

[anonymous]

cool, I love the line about the suns lipstick. it is about waching the sun rise with burt right?

[libralexi89]

...kinda.
it incorporates alot fo different stuff.

[anonymous]

well tell me. what dose it mean to you

[libralexi89]

It was an imitation of William Blake's "Night" that i had to do for a workshop in my creative writing class. The original was horrible, like a retarded....Mother Goose. I like this revision tho. ^^^^

nah, i tried putting memories from a bunch of my relationships into this one.

[anonymous]

wich lines r mine, if I have any?

[libralexi89]

haha, you cant figure that out?
lol well ill tell u this much, the entire third stanza is kinda based off when we got lost in the woods @ wilcott mill.

[anonymous]

I could make the hole poem about me, but I am vane and I know u don't think about me that much any more.

no 1 in the world reads this exept me and u so tell me what dose each line mean to you.

[libralexi89]

haha,
no now im intersted, explain how you could make this whole poem about you?

[anonymous]

I will but first u have to explain the poem.

[libralexi89]

hmmmness, i could analyze each line, but i dont think i will. too much. ill just sum up the meaning behind it

[anonymous]

what did u what an expanation of how I could make the hole poem about me, well it is EZ we spent so much time together, that I would have to do is pull simaler avents together and aply a medafor, wach.

Bitter day finally fades
into such an anticipated night

we would talk about me comeing in your windo the day before at school thes was a line about you antisceapation of me coming at night.

and so on and so forth. I told u I was vane ;)

Traces of the sun’s colorful lip-

stick remain on the sky

as she lays down for her rest
about going to sleep erly to get some sleep for school the next day

The sugary joys of twilight’s intoxication

wishfully enclose on us

while lonely clocks strike early hours
us fulling aslieep and wakeing up together

missing their childre
this one kinda got me but there was that scare ware we thought were prego, some time I still wish u were.
to wake from supposed needed slumber
we were allways f-ing with eachothers sleep.

[libralexi89]

ok well thats still only half the poem...

[anonymous]

ok

Grinning, playful stars intrigue the night
blissful in their paths, as ours
leaving mischievous light in each step
The music of our footfalls

this line could be about the night we walked in mt clem on the bord walk. the music, that was the night we repicked are soung from lil bowow, brown eyed gril.

i spent a lot of time trying to put thoughs memorys behind me, I can't think about this any more. jsut ues your admajination.

[libralexi89]

stop running from your past, kid. some memories suck but your gonna have to deal with them sooner or later. i have, amd ive excepted what has happened and what kind of person that made me. im not fighting it, i live with it.

if you wanna ignore everything we went thro together thats fine with me. but we have quite a few awesome memories that i choose not to ignore. even if were not still together you were still a huge part of my life and if it werent for you i wouldnt b who i am today.